Re: How People with Disabilities use the Web revised web stories draft versions

Dear Nora,

We put the content of the Business Case into the new wrapper within GitHub.
It is a helpful way to see the new content in place, in context. Maybe you
can do the same?

On Thu, Sep 14, 2017 at 1:38 PM, Sinclair, Norah M <
norah.sinclair@amac.gatech.edu> wrote:

> Shadi and Sylvie,
>
>
> Here are two more draft web story revisions for your feedback: Ms. Kaseem
> - Kaseem (name may need to be changed if you have a suggestion. Kaseem may
> be associated as a male name and the story uses the pronoun she) and Mr.
> Sands - Stephen. There is one more story to go, which I hope to complete
> today or tomorrow.
>
>
> I would like to have the review team begin reviewing the stories that you
> and Sylvie have already seen. What would be the best way to share the
> before and after versions of the stories, on a wiki or creating github
> issues for each story, or another way?
>
>
> Thank you,
>
> Norah
>
>
> *Norah Sinclair *
> Instructional Technology and User Support Specialist
>
> AMAC Accessibility Solutions and Research Center
> Georgia Institute of Technology | College of Design
> 512 Means Street | Suite 250 | Atlanta, GA 30318
>
> phone 404.894.7432 <(404)%20894-7432>
> www.amacusg.org
>
>
> ------------------------------
> *From:* Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
> *Sent:* Thursday, September 14, 2017 9:41 AM
> *To:* Sinclair, Norah M; Sylvie Duchateau
> *Cc:* public-eo-archive@w3.org; Bakken, Brent; Sharron Rush; shawn@w3.org
>
> *Subject:* Re: How People with Disabilities use the Web revised web
> stories draft versions
>
> Hi Norah,
>
> Excellent edits! I made a few minor tweaks using track changes for your
> consideration - these are all for editors' discretion.
>
> Best,
>    Shadi
>
>
> On 07/09/2017 22:07, Sinclair, Norah M wrote:
> > Shadi and Sylvie,
> >
> >
> > Here are two more draft revisions of web stories attached for your
> feedback, Ms. Olsen (Katie) and Mr. Yunus (Yun) with the goal to make the
> content simple and brief and to use active voice and actionable statements.
> Katie's story may need to be compressed a bit more.
> >
> >
> > Regards,
> >
> > Norah
> >
> >
> > Norah Sinclair
> > Instructional Technology and User Support Specialist
> >
> > AMAC Accessibility Solutions and Research Center
> > Georgia Institute of Technology | College of Design
> > 512 Means Street | Suite 250 | Atlanta, GA 30318
> >
> > phone 404.894.7432 <(404)%20894-7432>
> > www.amacusg.org<http://www.amacusg.org/>
> >
> >
> > ________________________________
> > From: Sinclair, Norah M
> > Sent: Thursday, August 31, 2017 4:03 PM
> > To: Shadi Abou-Zahra; Sylvie Duchateau
> > Cc: public-eo-archive@w3.org
> > Subject: Re: How People with Disabilities use the Web revised web
> stories draft versions
> >
> >
> > Shadi,
> >
> >
> > Thanks for the feedback. I'll make the changes and send revisions.
> >
> >
> > Norah
> >
> >
> > Norah Sinclair
> > Instructional Technology and User Support Specialist
> >
> > AMAC Accessibility Solutions and Research Center
> > Georgia Institute of Technology | College of Design
> > 512 Means Street | Suite 250 | Atlanta, GA 30318
> >
> > phone 404.894.7432 <(404)%20894-7432>
> > www.amacusg.org<http://www.amacusg.org/>
> >
> >
> > ________________________________
> > From: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
> > Sent: Thursday, August 31, 2017 10:15 AM
> > To: Sinclair, Norah M; Sylvie Duchateau
> > Cc: public-eo-archive@w3.org
> > Subject: Re: How People with Disabilities use the Web revised web
> stories draft versions
> >
> > Hi Norah,
> >
> > Looks excellent!
> >
> > I've made some comments using track changes for your consideration.
> >
> > Best,
> >     Shadi
> >
> >
> > On 30/08/2017 19:40, Sinclair, Norah M wrote:
> >> Shadi and Sylvie,
> >>
> >>
> >> Here are two more draft revisions of web stories attached. Mr. Jones
> (Jonah) and Ms. Martinez (Martine). The goal is to make the content simple
> and brief and to use active voice and actionable statements.
> >>
> >>
> >> The next several stories do not seem to need quite as much revision. I
> will send additional stories later today. Please provide whatever feedback
> you may have. After your feedback, the goal will be to provide updated
> drafts to the review team beginning next week.
> >>
> >>
> >> Thank you,
> >>
> >> Norah
> >>
> >>
> >> Norah Sinclair
> >> Instructional Technology and User Support Specialist
> >>
> >> AMAC Accessibility Solutions and Research Center
> >> Georgia Institute of Technology | College of Design
> >> 512 Means Street | Suite 250 | Atlanta, GA 30318
> >>
> >> phone 404.894.7432 <(404)%20894-7432>
> >> www.amacusg.org<http://www.amacusg.org/>
> >>
> >>
> >> ________________________________
> >> From: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
> >> Sent: Tuesday, August 22, 2017 4:06 PM
> >> To: Sinclair, Norah M; Sylvie Duchateau; Bakken, Brent; Sharron Rush;
> shawn@w3.org
> >> Subject: Re: How People with Disabilities use the Web planned revisions
> and content questions
> >>
> >> Hi Norah,
> >>
> >> I agree that the other sections are more concise and have an active
> >> tone. I recall Sharron still had some concerns, especially with the
> >> principles page. I think it may be the current one-page presentation
> >> that is creating this perceived wall of text, so maybe your idea of
> >> adding graphics could help. I also don't know how the new WAI design
> >> addresses these types of pages in terms of information architecture.
> >>
> >> As to contacting CoGa, they already have been contacted maybe over a
> >> year ago meanwhile. While terminology and technology has moved most
> >> significantly in this area, I think also the other sections have aged
> >> and should probably be looked over by relevant experts. Not sure how
> >> this should be best approached, though. Maybe the chairs have ideas.
> >>
> >> Best,
> >>      Shadi
> >>
> >>
> >> On 22/08/2017 20:58, Sinclair, Norah M wrote:
> >>> Hello Shadi, Sylvie, Brent, Sharron, and Shawn,
> >>>
> >>> The resource, “How People with Disabilities Use the Web,” consists of
> several in-depth pages, including Stories of Web Users, Diversity of Web
> Users, Diversity in Web Use and Accessibility Principles. The co-editors
> are seeking to:
> >>> • Simplify & Tersify — Make content simple and brief. Cut words. Cut
> Sentences.
> >>> • Bullets & Graphics — Break up passages into bullets when
> appropriate. Suggest graphics.
> >>> • Front-loaded Action — Use active voice, and action statements.
> >>>
> >>> We have determined this process is needed for Stories of Web Users and
> we’ve agreed upon a draft format for the first story, which basically
> reduces the word count in half while conveying the important content from
> the original story. The other stories are currently being revised using the
> same type of approach.
> >>>
> >>> To me, the other resources, Diversity of Web Users, Diversity in Web
> Use and Accessibility Principles may not be in need of the same type of
> revision (goal of reducing content by 50% or so).  The content of these
> resources (Diversity of Web Users, Diversity in Web Use and Accessibility
> Principles) is broken up into bullets, and is written using active, action
> statements. The main revision could be adding graphics or linking to the
> web perspective videos. What are the thoughts of the co-editors and EO
> chair review team on this? Would this be a good question to ask the
> reviewers for their feedback?
> >>>
> >>> Also, should the Cognitive and Learning Disabilities Accessibility
> Task Force (Cognitive A11Y TF) be consulted for suggested revisions to
> section: Examples of cognitive, learning, and neurological disabilities?
> >>>
> >>> https://www.w3.org/WAI/intro/people-use-web/diversity
> >>>
> >>> Thanks very much,
> >>> Norah
> >>>
> >>> Norah Sinclair
> >>> Instructional Technology and User Support Specialist
> >>>
> >>> AMAC Accessibility Solutions and Research Center
> >>> Georgia Institute of Technology | College of Design
> >>> 512 Means Street | Suite 250 | Atlanta, GA 30318
> >>>
> >>> phone 404.894.7432 <(404)%20894-7432>
> >>> www.amacusg.org<http://www.amacusg.org/>
> >>>
> >>
> >> --
> >> Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/
> >> Accessibility Strategy and Technology Specialist
> >> Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
> >> World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)
> >>
> >
> > --
> > Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/
> > Accessibility Strategy and Technology Specialist
> > Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
> > World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)
> >
>
> --
> Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/
> Accessibility Strategy and Technology Specialist
> Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
> World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)
>



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