Re: DXWG Plenary 2019-10-29T20:00:00

Thanks, Annette.

I revised the paragraph by using a slightly different version of your proposed re-wording.

Preview here:

https://raw.githack.com/w3c/dxwg/andrea-perego-dcat-imp-report-rev/dcat-implementation-report/#guidelines

Cheers,

Andrea

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From: Annette Greiner <amgreiner@lbl.gov>
Sent: 30 October 2019 01:15:51
To: PEREGO Andrea (JRC-ISPRA); public-dxwg-wg@w3.org
Subject: Re: DXWG Plenary 2019-10-29T20:00:00

Thanks for addressing that. Unfortunately, I still find the new version
confusing. What is the antecedent for the "about which"? what is the
antecedent for the "they"? Can you state the intention more simply?
Breaking the sentence up may allow you to make it clearer.

-Annette

On 10/29/19 4:49 PM, andrea.perego@ec.europa.eu wrote:
> Thanks for pointing out the type, Annette.
>
> I revised the relevant text in PR https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://github.com/w3c/dxwg/pull/1145__;!NW73rmyV52c!UwHP7Cm-TNpeiEgoCpreS6xif_wUN_Ag-iL6t9tVFb8YGSrXFveMSNjHobXVqB41UEv2KKQ$
>
> Cheers,
>
> Andrea
>
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> Andrea Perego, Ph.D.
> Scientific Project Officer
> European Commission DG JRC
> Directorate B - Growth and Innovation
> Unit B6 - Digital Economy
> Via E. Fermi, 2749 - TP 262
> 21027 Ispra VA, Italy
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> https://ec.europa.eu/jrc/
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> The views expressed are purely those of the writer and may
> not in any circumstances be regarded as stating an official
> position of the European Commission.
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> ________________________________________
> From: Annette Greiner <amgreiner@lbl.gov>
> Sent: 29 October 2019 23:05:55
> To: public-dxwg-wg@w3.org
> Subject: Re: DXWG Plenary 2019-10-29T20:00:00
>
> The re-charter poll has been closed for most of the past week, so I will just state here that I am okay with it in its current form.
>
> The implementation plan also seems fine, except that I noticed one predicateless run-on sentence (note the number of prepositional phrases) that needs a little editing: "The following table the guidelines which have been reviewed to get complementary evidence of the actual implementation of the revisions proposed in [VOCAB-DCAT-2<https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://w3c.github.io/dxwg/dcat-implementation-report/*bib-vocab-dcat-2__;Iw!NW73rmyV52c!QwjWzYEnjiITxUQxrBHdi4NLzWS0kosBQ1et_v4XgNn1oO0ykEhVZ4V7EwJAYhDS_jP9GV0$>] in the data catalogs and DCAT-based vocabularies listed in the previous sections."
>
> A possible rewrite: "The following table lists guidelines documents that demonstrate actual implementations of the revisions proposed in [VOCAB-DCAT-2<https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://w3c.github.io/dxwg/dcat-implementation-report/*bib-vocab-dcat-2__;Iw!NW73rmyV52c!QwjWzYEnjiITxUQxrBHdi4NLzWS0kosBQ1et_v4XgNn1oO0ykEhVZ4V7EwJAYhDS_jP9GV0$>]. These examples are drawn from the data catalogs and DCAT-based vocabularies listed in the previous sections."
>
> -Annette
>
> On 10/27/19 1:58 AM, pedro winstley wrote:
> Dear Colleagues
>
> the next DXWG plenary is at 20:00 UTC on 29 October
>
> This is a really important meeting where we need to sign off on the DCAT implementation evidence and the WG re-charter
>
> The agenda is at https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.w3.org/2017/dxwg/wiki/Meetings:Telecon2019.10.29__;!NW73rmyV52c!UwHP7Cm-TNpeiEgoCpreS6xif_wUN_Ag-iL6t9tVFb8YGSrXFveMSNjHobXVqB41L8Qn-Ww$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.w3.org/2017/dxwg/wiki/Meetings:Telecon2019.10.29__;!NW73rmyV52c!QwjWzYEnjiITxUQxrBHdi4NLzWS0kosBQ1et_v4XgNn1oO0ykEhVZ4V7EwJAYhDSQvNQIYk$>
>
> Please complete the poll on the re-charter - https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.w3.org/2002/09/wbs/99375/charter_2__;!NW73rmyV52c!UwHP7Cm-TNpeiEgoCpreS6xif_wUN_Ag-iL6t9tVFb8YGSrXFveMSNjHobXVqB41NiPI-T4$ <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://www.w3.org/2002/09/wbs/99375/charter_2__;!NW73rmyV52c!QwjWzYEnjiITxUQxrBHdi4NLzWS0kosBQ1et_v4XgNn1oO0ykEhVZ4V7EwJAYhDSBr4jt6Q$> , especially if you cannot attend the meeting.
>
> Kind regards
>
> Peter & Karen - Chairs
>
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> Lawrence Berkeley National Laboratory
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Received on Wednesday, 30 October 2019 11:45:44 UTC