Re: ACTION-2160: Review web of things (wot) security and privacy considerations (Accessible Platform Architectures Working Group)

I've reviewed this Note. In terms of technical content there is nothing 
of concern from an accessibility point of view.

I noted a number of editorial changes that would improve the readability 
of the Note, and/or its inclusion quality though.

1. Introduction.

The word "Iy" is used at the start of the following sentence. Assume it 
should be "It..."?
"Iy may in fact be identical..."

2. Lifecycle

The acronym OEM should be expanded the first time it is used:
"Manufactured: The WoT device has been manufactured by an OEM. It might 
have a WoT runtime present that enables single or multi-tenant users or 
it might..."

The acronym SW should be expanded the first time it is used:
"...integrator and any necessary SW configuration has been performed..."

3. Requirements
3.1 General

The acronym TD should be expanded the first time it is used:
"Exposing: When exposing a TD, especially via the Scripting API, it 
should be possible to use best practices for security, including 
maintaining the integrity..."

The acronyms HTTP(S), CoAP(S), and
MQTT(S should be expanded the first time they're used:
"Protocols: The WoT can potentially apply to many protocols but to limit 
scope in this discussion we will focus on the needs of HTTP(S), CoAP(S), and
MQTT(S)."


3.2.1 Primary stakeholders

Recommend using gender neutral language in the example of the System User:
"These might be physical users (e.g. John and his family in their smart 
home) or..."

Could be:
"These might be physical users (e.g. Alex and their family in their 
smart home) or..."



Léonie.
On 29/08/2018 17:47, Accessible Platform Architectures Working Group 
Issue Tracker wrote:
> ACTION-2160: Review web of things (wot) security and privacy considerations (Accessible Platform Architectures Working Group)
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> https://www.w3.org/WAI/APA/track/actions/2160
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> On: Léonie Watson
> Due: 2018-01-31
> Product: Spec reviews
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Received on Wednesday, 14 November 2018 21:56:43 UTC