Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-httpbis-priority-11: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-httpbis-priority-11: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thanks to Maria Ines Robles for their General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/k0c2L3WOP5A_dxSAHzy6PkmoHvw).

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All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

Section 1. , paragraph 3, nit:
> have their own needs that are independent from client needs, so they often co
>                               ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
"independent of"?

Section 1. , paragraph 4, nit:
> s as input into prioritization decision making. The design and implementatio
>                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
The noun "decision-making" (= the process of deciding something) is spelled
with a hyphen.

Section 5. , paragraph 4, nit:
> ream, allowing them to be sent independent from the stream that carries the r
>                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
"independent of"?

Section 7.2. , paragraph 9, nit:
> ded value. This is different from the the request header field, in which omi
>                                   ^^^^^^^
Two determiners in a row. Choose either "the" or "the".

Section 8. , paragraph 9, nit:
>  SHOULD be served by sharing bandwidth amongst them. Incremental resources a
>                                    ^^^^^^^
Do not mix variants of the same word ("amongst" and "among") within a single
text.

Section 10. , paragraph 3, nit:
> t generation order might lead to sub-optimal results at the client, as early
>                                  ^^^^^^^^^^^
This word is normally spelled as one.

Section 13.2. , paragraph 2, nit:
> n registers the following entry in the the Hypertext Transfer Protocol (HTTP)
>                                    ^^^^^^^
Two determiners in a row. Choose either "the" or "the".

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 * http://tools.ietf.org/agenda/83/slides/slides-83-httpbis-5.pdf

Received on Thursday, 16 December 2021 14:39:08 UTC