Re: I-D Action: draft-ietf-httpbis-bcp56bis-04.txt

Hi Mark,

Here is my review of this draft:

1. "HTTP-based APIs defined by standards need to more carefully..."  
runs more smoothly than "standards-defined HTTP-based APIs need to  
more carefully consider...".

2. "At the same time, the IETF has a tradition of protocol reuse..."  
We could remove the contextual part "At the same time".

3. "These have more freedom to modify protocol operations" instead of  
"These have more freedom to modify protocol operation".

4. "or stacking the application upon HTTP, instead of using it"  
captures better the writer's mind than "or making the application be  
based upon HTTP, instead of using it".

5. The document needs no more to warrant that "Applications using HTTP  
MAY specify a minimum version to be supported (HTTP/1.1 is  
suggested)": few lines above, it already said: "When specifying the  
use of HTTP, an application SHOULD use [RFC7230] as the primary  
reference". And [RFC7230] does refer to HTTP/1.1.

6. "Because URLs occur in and are generated in HTTP artefacts  
commonly, often without human intervention..." I did not get what you  
have meant here.

7. "Applications that use HTTP can use the well-known ports...or they  
can be deployed upon others." stresses better the work of IANA than  
"Applications that use HTTP can use the applicable default port...or  
they can be deployed upon other ports."

8. The sentence "This decision can be made at deployment time, or  
might be encouraged by the application’s specification (e.g., by  
registering a port for that application)." should be in the same  
paragraph than "In either case, non-default ports..."

9. Moreover, "The usage of unknown ports can be made at deployment  
time..." instead of "This decision can be made at deployment time..."  
and "In either case, unknown ports will need to be reflected..."  
instead of "In either case, non-default ports will need to be  
reflected..." speak the same voice than Point 8.

9. Idem "Using an unknown port has privacy implications..." for "Using  
a port other than the default has privacy implications..."

10. Some Markdown remained: "also required to be _generic_", " the  
best approach is to consider the application _as_ a Web application".



> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts   
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the Hypertext Transfer Protocol WG of the IETF.
>         Title           : On the use of HTTP as a Substrate
>         Author          : Mark Nottingham
>  Filename        : draft-ietf-httpbis-bcp56bis-04.txt
>  Pages           : 27
>  Date            : 2018-04-11
> Abstract:
>    HTTP is often used as a substrate for other application protocols
>    (a.k.a.  HTTP-based APIs).  This document specifies best practices
>    for these protocols' use of HTTP.
>    This document obsoletes RFC 3205.
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