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Re: p1: Purely Editorial Feedback

From: Mark Nottingham <mnot@mnot.net>
Date: Mon, 22 Apr 2013 13:50:14 +1000
Cc: "ietf-http-wg@w3.org Group" <ietf-http-wg@w3.org>
Message-Id: <ED45FD2D-697F-4B0A-8CA7-750C8AD4BBB7@mnot.net>
To: Roy Fielding <fielding@gbiv.com>, "Julian F. Reschke" <julian.reschke@gmx.de>
Now:
  http://trac.tools.ietf.org/wg/httpbis/trac/ticket/446


On 20/04/2013, at 1:25 PM, Mark Nottingham <mnot@mnot.net> wrote:

> This is strictly editorial feedback on the latest p1.
> 
> * 2.2 "... requirements that an automated action be confirmed by the user before proceeding can be met via advance configuration choices..."   s/can/might/  (don't imply that it's a closed set)
> 
> * 2.2 Add text to indicate that the chain of intermediaries isn't necessarily fixed; i.e., that while it goes through "C" this time, the next request might go direct to origin, or through "D", or...
> 
> * 2.3 'A "gateway"... is a receiving agent that acts a a layer above some other server(s) and translates the received requests to the underlying server's protocol.'   "layer" "receiving agent" and "underlying" are awkward here. Suggest:
> 
> """
> A "gateway" (a.k.a., "reverse proxy") is a server that acts as an origin server, but translates received requests and forwards them to another server or servers, using any protocol (possibly HTTP).
> """
> 
> * 2.3 "MUST implement the Connection and Via header fields for both connections." --> "... header fields for both inbound and outbound connections."
> 
> * 2.7.1 "Other protocols might also be used..." -> "Other transport protocols might also be used..."
> 
> * 4.3 "For chained requests..." -> "For requests from an intermediary..." 
> 
> * 5.2 "If the client has a response cache and the request semantics can be satisfied by a cache ([Part6]), then the request is usually directed to the cache first." --> "If the client has a HTTP cache [Part6] and the request can be satisfied by it, then the request is usually directed there first."  (simplify, simplify)
> 
> * 5.7.2 "A transforming proxy MUST preserve the message payload..."  "MUST NOT modify" would be clearer here.
> 
> * 6. "HTTP only presumes a reliable transport with in-order delivery of requests and the corresponding responses."   This isn't really well-stated; the important thing is that the data transport itself is in-order, because requests and responses themselves can be chunked into multiple messages.  Suggest: 
> 
> "HTTP only presumes a reliable, bi-directional transport with in-order delivery."
> 
> * 6. "Most severs are designed to maintain thousands of concurrent connections.."   s/thousands/many/
> 
> * 6. "Most clients maintain multiple connections in parallel..." --> "Clients MAY maintain multiple connections in parallel..."
> 
> * 6.7 uses unregistered upgrade tokens in the example; this should be noted.
> 
> * 6.7 There should be a full example of an Upgrade header in a request and in a response.
> 
> * 8.3 There should be an appropriate reference to RFC6585 here for 431 Request Header Fields Too Large.
> 
> * A.2 Is there any particular ordering here? Perhaps they should be ordered by section?  (same for other parts)
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> 
> --
> Mark Nottingham   http://www.mnot.net/
> 
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