primer comments

John:
All comments incorporated in the latest edtor's draft [1]. Thanks very much for a careful reading.
Best regards
Nilo
[1] http://www.w3.org/2000/xp/Group/2/01/29/edcopy-soap12-part0-20020129.html


> -----Original Message-----
> From: John Ibbotson [mailto:john_ibbotson@uk.ibm.com]
> Sent: Monday, March 18, 2002 6:11 AM
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> Nilo,
> Congratulations on the Primer, it reads very well. Just a few 
> relatively
> minor comments:
>    Section 2 second paragraph - sentence "In this application .......
>    planned trip, *which* information is transferred in a SOAP message.
>    Section 2.1 third paragraph from end - "The means by which 
> a SOAP ....,
>    and is *presumably* determined ......" Remove presumably.
>    Examples 4 and 5 should include the root attribute 
> following resolution
>    of issue 78
>    Section 2.4 (this is only a personal preference) - Replace 
> 7bis and 7ter
>    with 7a and 7b
>    Section 2.4 - space needed between "known" and "a priori"
>    Section 2.4 - table formatting. Blank Node column.
> 
> John
> 
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> Hello John:
> I understand that you undertook as an action item to review the latest
> Primer draft. In case you have not already begun, may I 
> recommend that you
> print out the latest (circa 3/6/02) draft [1] which has some 
> additional
> changes made since the F2F. In case you have already started 
> with the F2F
> version, here are the most signficant changes (hopefully for 
> the better):
> 
> - moved section 2.2 (Processing Model) to the end of section 
> 2 (as section
> 2.4) so that readers are gradually introduced to the subject 
> via examples
> first. The contents are ***exactly the same***.
> 
> - beefed up the section 5 on changes between SOAP 1.1 and 1.2 (removed
> section 5.2 and made it section 5.1 top level section 2). Can 
> you think of
> any more differences?
> 
> - miscellaneous changes such as replacing "transport binding" with
> "protocol binding" etc.
> 
> You'll find all changes since the f2F in the change log.
> Thanks
> Nilo
> P.S. The only thing I have to complete is section 4.2, showing another
> serialization scheme.
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> [1]
> http://www.w3.org/2000/xp/Group/2/01/29/edcopy-soap12-part0-20
020129.html#L4697


Nilo Mitra
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