Re: Draft: Executive Summary

OK, done!
http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/lld/wiki/index.php?title=ExecutiveSummary&diff=5840&oldid=5758

Antoine


> +1, Antoine. I'd say - go ahead and make those changes. - kc
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> Quoting Antoine Isaac <aisaac@few.vu.nl>:
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>> Hi Emma,
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>> I was just about to make remarks that would lead to a similar re-write, so a big +1 :-)
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>> I think there's also some redundancy in this pragraph:
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>> This report contains an analysis of current state of library linked data, including detailed inventories of available vocabularies and technologies. The analysis was based on a set of use cases contributed by a variety of parties ranging from small, independent projects to activities in national libraries. From these the group extracted benefits, a brief report of the current state of library linked data, and recommendations for next steps.]
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>> I'd propose
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>> Our work originates from a set of use cases contributed by a variety of parties ranging from small, independent projects to activities in national libraries. From these the group extracted benefits, a brief report of the current state of library linked data, and recommendations for next steps. Our analysis also features detailed inventories of available vocabularies and technologies.
>> ]
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>> Finally, I'm afraid I'll argue for downplaying the last paragraph of the second part, on the Community Group. As we don't know when, or even, whether, such a group will happen, I suggest instead of the current:
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>> The Incubator Group will transition to a W3C community group to provide an ongoing focal point for this activity. The community group will form shortly after the ending date for the incubator group. At that point the founders of the community group will solicit membership and ideas for directions and activities.
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>> by
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>> To accompany such efforts, the members of the Incubator Group will seek to continue its activities and provide an ongoing focal point for these, for instance by transitioning to a W3C community group. At that point the founders of the community group would solicit membership and ideas for directions and activities.
>> ]
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>> Would that work?
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>> Antoine
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>>> Hi Karen & all,
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>>> I propose some rewriting on the first paragraph of the executive summary, trying to make it both shorter and more easily understandable to an outsider (for instance I think the quotes for the phrase extracted from the charter are irrelevant here). Also I tried to reflect the broader scope of our definition of Libraries.
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>>> currently:
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>>> This is the report of the W3C Library Linked Data Incubator Group. Working from May 2010 until August 2011, the group was given the charge to "...help increase global interoperability of library data on the Web, by bringing together people involved in Semantic Web activities—focusing on Linked Data—in the library community and beyond, building on existing initiatives, and identifying collaboration tracks for the future."
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>>> The reason for the existence of this group at this time is the great interest in sharing bibliographic data on the Web using Linked Data technologies. For this to be successful it will be necessary to publish library data on the web using semantic web standards.
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>>> I propose:
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>>> The W3C Library Linked Data Incubator Group worked from May 2010 until August 2011, this final report being the main outcome of this activity. The mission of the incubator group was to help increase global interoperability of library data on the Web. At this time, libraries and other cultural heritage or memory institutions, including museums and archives, show a great interest in sharing data on the Web. Existing use cases and library applications showcase the benefits of adopting Semantic Web standards and Linked Data principles, in order to publish valuable information assets that library create and curate, such as bibliographic data, lists of concepts, names, persons, etc.
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>>> What do you think ?
>>> Emma
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>>> On Tue, Aug 16, 2011 at 3:05 PM, Jodi Schneider <jodi.schneider@deri.org <mailto:jodi.schneider@deri.org>> wrote:
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>>> It's very good to have a start on this! I think what's there is rather discouraging, particularly in the summary of analysis. Unfortunately I don't have time to look closer and possibly fix it -- but perhaps someone else can push further the start Karen has given us?
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>>> I'm not sure whether, for our readers, Linked Data is obvious as a starting point -- so I'd rather that we talk about "great interest in sharing bibliographic data on the Web" rather than the "great interest in sharing bibliographic data on the Web using Linked Data technologies". This is a pretty significant change so I didn't just make it!
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>>> -Jodi
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>>> On 11 Aug 2011, at 15:35, Karen Coyle wrote:
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>>>> There is now a very drafty Executive Summary in the transcluded report. This should stimulate a discussion of what information should be included in the ExecSum. Please read and comment.
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>>>> Our goal is to keep the ExecSum within a single page, so be aware that any information included in this section must be very succinct. However, there is room for expansion as the current draft is especially short.
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>>>> http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/lld/wiki/ExecutiveSummary
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>>>> --
>>>> Karen Coyle
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