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Re: Please review WPDS blog post

From: Doug Schepers <schepers@w3.org>
Date: Mon, 02 Sep 2013 21:00:56 -0400
Message-ID: <522534C8.2060505@w3.org>
To: Andre Jay Meissner <ameissne@adobe.com>
CC: "public-webplatform@w3.org" <public-webplatform@w3.org>
Hi, Jay, Chris–

On 9/2/13 12:04 PM, Andre Jay Meissner wrote:
 > Chris and me wrote a resume for the blog. Please review, as always it
 > needs two approvers please:
 > http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=626&preview=true

This post (and Doc Sprint) looks great! Really good color.

I suggest a couple of minor tweaks:

* Does Andre Jay Meissner from Adobe always refer to himself in the 3rd 
person? :P I'm not sure how to fix this, other than to suggest "I ( 
Andre Jay Meissner from Adobe) kicked off proceedings"... which also 
sounds weird. Oh, well.

* "kicked off proceedings" -> "kicked off the proceedings"

* stuck in: in American English (such as it is), this has a negative 
connotation, like they were forced to do this against their will (like, 
"stuck in traffic" or "stuck in school on a Spring day"). I think in 
British English, it means "to start doing something enthusiastically". 
Maybe "and jumped head-first in to a variety of tasks" or something?

Thanks again for the Doc Sprint and the report!

Regards-
-Doug
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