Re: offline review instead of meeting

Thanks Samuel, fixed!

Regards,
   Shadi


On 16.7.2014 15:02, Yod Samuel Martín wrote:
> Dear WG,
>
> Below you may find my comments for today's version:
>
>    - Is it immediately clear to new readers what this document is about?
> Yes.
>
>    - Is it clear what the current status is and what feedback is needed?
> Wording is clear, but I would suggest highlighting the relevant paragraphs
> in a separate box (an <aside>?), that is, third paragraph in status section
> plus following list items). Yet I am not sure if this fits usual styling
> conventions.
>
>    - Can readers skim the document and get an overview on its contents?
> Yes.
>
>    - Are there particularly confusing word or sentences that you notice?
> Section: Abstract
> Suggestion: revert "functionality" to "features", or include both.
> Rationale: from my understanding, functionality is a function that is
> provided by the tool, but feature is a broader concept. E.g. aggregating
> results (2.3.5) describes some functionality, but localization is not
> (mainly) a functionality but a presentation (non-functional) aspect, yet it
> is a feature nonetheless. This is why section 2 title reads "features" and
> this is a prevalent term throughout the document.
> I have not found any others at first sight, but I am too conditioned by the
> overall process to be able to provide an objective answer :-)
>
> Editorial comments:
>
> Section: 1 Introduction
> Suggestion: replace "fragements" with "fragments"
> Rationale: typo
>
> Section: 1.1 Evaluation Tools
> Suggestion: change "Similarly" to "Besides"
> Rationale: I cannot get the similarity between the examples connected, so
> another adverb would fit better than "similarly".
>
> Regards,
>
> Samuel.
>
> -----Mensaje original-----
> De: Shadi Abou-Zahra [mailto:shadi@w3.org]
> Enviado el: miércoles, 16 de julio de 2014 11:00
> Para: ERT WG
> Asunto: offline review instead of meeting
>
> Dear ERT WG,
>
> Instead of the meeting today, please use the time to read the updated WAET
> document in detail:
>    - http://www.w3.org/WAI/ER/WD-AERT/ED-AERT
>
> The most important things to look out for at the moment are:
>    - Is it immediately clear to new readers what this document is about?
>    - Is it clear what the current status is and what feedback is needed?
>    - Can readers skim the document and get an overview on its contents?
>    - Are there particularly confusing word or sentences that you notice?
>
> Many thanks for your help reviewing this document!
>
> Regards,
>     Shadi
>
> --
> Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/ Activity Lead, W3C/WAI
> International Program Office Evaluation and Repair Tools Working Group (ERT
> WG) Research and Development Working Group (RDWG)
>
>
>
>

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Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/
Activity Lead, W3C/WAI International Program Office
Evaluation and Repair Tools Working Group (ERT WG)
Research and Development Working Group (RDWG)

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