Hi Paul, et al -
I've performed an initial review, focused entirely on the introduction.
It's going to take me longer to go through the rest of the document,
including the more technical mappings. I've made enough changes in the
introduction however, that I felt it worthwhile to send out my changes. No
obligation to accept these verbatim; my style is by no means perfect.
However, as is often the case in writing, what we write in summary makes a
better introduction. I've moved the conclusion up to the beginning, as it
seemed the clearest way to approach the document. Likewise, the example
has been moved toward the end of the document. By the time the reader
approaches the example, the terms and expressions used should be much
clearer (the text provides insight to the example in this case, not the
other way around).
I'm attaching multiple formats - I originally edited in Word 2003, but have
an open office writer and PDF version too - something here for everyone :)
(See attached file: PROV-DC revision.doc)(See attached file: PROV-DC
revision.pdf)(See attached file: PROV-DC revision.odt)
-Craig
From: Paul Groth <p.t.groth@vu.nl>
To: Simon Miles <simon.miles@kcl.ac.uk>, Craig M Trim/Costa
Mesa/IBM@IBMUS,
Cc: Provenance Working Group WG <public-prov-wg@w3.org>, Daniel
Garijo <dgarijo@delicias.dia.fi.upm.es>
Date: 11/21/2012 05:40 PM
Subject: Request review of prov-dc
Sent by: pgroth@gmail.com
Hi Simon, Craig, all:
Can you go ahead and review prov-dc for release as a first public working
draft?
You can find the document here:
http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/839d503bd064/dc-note/Overview.html
The key question is to see whether the document is ready for release as an
fpwd.
If it is possible, can you have your review done by Nov. 29?
Anyone else in the working group is also invited to review the document.
Thanks
Paul
