Re: new Privacy Best Practices draft

Josh

I've made these edits or other edits to simplify the text in question

Thanks for the review comments.

regards, Frederick

Frederick Hirsch
Nokia



On Jul 6, 2011, at 1:36 PM, ext Josh Soref wrote:

> http://dev.w3.org/2009/dap/privacy-practices/
> 
>> Examples including choosing the data to share,
> 
> s/including/include/
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>> User decisions work well when the user knows what they are deciding
>> about and when they make the decision in context (at the time) -
>> earlier decisions may have different effect when making a decision
> 
> <effect when> needs some punctuation or a word or something (<period>, <comma>, <semicolon>, "than")
> 
>> in real-time there are task-specific
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>> depending on the user retention choices.
> 
> s/user/user's/
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>> and be able to make choices based on those considerings.
> 
> s/considerings/considerations/
> 
>> differently.Thus
> 
> s/differently.Thus/differently. Thus/
> 
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