Revised XML Proposal

Ray (mostly),

Regarding the revised _Requesting XML Record_ proposal at
http://www.loc.gov/z3950/agency/proposals/request-xml.html

The technical content looks good to me.  I have a few quibbles with
the wording, but they are not important.

	The globally unique identifier may but need not be a
	URI. If a URI, it may, but need not be the locator of
	an XML schema definition or DTD. (And if a URI, it
	need not be an HTTP URI.)

The phrase "may be need not be" feels awkward to me, and would read
better as "may be, but need not be,".  And the last of these three
sentences should use the same phrasing as the first two:

	The globally unique identifier may be, but need not
	be, a URI. If it is a URI it may be, but need not be,
	the locator of an XML schema definition or DTD.  (And
	if a URI, it may be, but need not be, an HTTP URI.)

Also:

	Example 3.  The identifier:
	"http://www.editeur.org/onix/ReferenceNames" would be
	used as the element set name to indicate the dtd at
	http://www.editeur.org/onix/2.0/reference/onix-international.dtd.

"DTD" is an acronym and so should be all-caps.

And finally:

	Example 4.  The identifier:
	"http://www.kb.nl/persons/theo/dcx/" would be used as
	the element set name to indicate that records are to
	be composed according to the definition at that URI
	(http://www.kb.nl/persons/theo/dcx).

It would be more explicitly exemplify what's going on if this said
"... composed according to the prose definition at ..."

Sorry to be picky.  (But not so sorry that I won't :-)

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