Editorial comments on XPointer Last Call Working Drafts

Hello,

Here's a list of minor editorial comments on XPointer Last Call
Working Drafts.  These are purely editorial and my personal comments;
I might send other (possibly) substantial comments as part of some
WG's Last Call comments later.

XPointer Framework [1]

3.2 Shorthand Pointer

- It would be helpful to have an explicit reference to "3.3.8 ID"
  of XML Schema Part 2 [2] when the spec talks about XML Schema ID type.
  The spec only have a reference to XML Schema Part 1, but I sometimes
  have hard time to find a definition in the XML Schema specs ...

A References

- I would suggest to follow guidelines described in the W3C Manual of
  Style, "9.5 References" [3].  Particular recommendations include:

   - If a reference is a W3C Recommendation track technical report
     that has not reached Recommendation, state in the References
     section that it is "work in progress."
   - If there is an institutionalized identifier (URI) for a document,
     cite the most specific identifier.
   - Reference titles are recommended, not the "URI-in-your-face"
     idiom, as link text

- For reference to RFC, www.rfc-editor.org should be used rather than
  www.ietf.org.  

These comments also apply to references in other two drafts.

A.2 Non-Normative References

- Unlike other references, the "HTML " entry doesn't include editors'
  names, but it should.

- The "RDF" entry refers to the RDF/XML Syntax Specification, but
  the URI points to the RDF Model and Syntax Specification.  Although
  the former is a revision to the latter, you should not confuse
  readers by having an inconsistent reference.

XPointer element() Scheme [4]

3 Language and Processing

- In the paragraph preceding the following example,

     element(intro/3/1)

  "intro" in 

     ... identified by the value ""intro"", ...

  seems overly quoted.

XPointer xmlns Scheme() [5]

- No paticular editorial comments, except for the same set of comments
  on references.

[1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2002/WD-xptr-framework-20020710/
[2] http://www.w3.org/TR/2001/REC-xmlschema-2-20010502/#ID
[3] http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#References
[4] http://www.w3.org/TR/2002/WD-xptr-element-20020710/
[5] http://www.w3.org/TR/2002/WD-xptr-xmlns-20020710/

Regards,
-- 
Masayasu Ishikawa / mimasa@w3.org
W3C - World Wide Web Consortium

Received on Monday, 15 July 2002 14:00:58 UTC