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XKMS Requirements Last Call: Comments

From: Shivaram Mysore <Shivaram.Mysore@Sun.COM>
Date: Wed, 10 Apr 2002 14:47:41 -0700 (PDT)
Message-Id: <200204102147.g3ALlhW16543@ha1sca-mail1.SFBay.Sun.COM>
To: fjh@alum.mit.edu, mike.just@entrust.com
Cc: www-xkms@w3.org
Hi,

Here is a list of comments and some nitpicks:

1.  Status of the Document
	o Change "(Activity Statement)" to "[Activity Statement]" and add a
	  reference to it in the references section.
	o Last paragraph - correct typo "(pubicly" - "(publicly" - missing 'l'
	
2.  Introduction and Terminology
	o  I paragraph - replace " and" with "," in the following "management
		requirements of XML Encryption [XML Encryption] and XML Digital
		Signature [XMLDSIG]"
		+ remove word "to" after the above phrase.
		(basically slight reword sentence due to usage of >1 "and")
		
	o  Asynchronous exchange -
		- possibly reword the sentence starting with "For example .."
		(it is not sounding good to me)
	o  Key Name
		Rephrase 2nd Sentence - 3 instances of word "key".  I believe,
		the last 2 usages of key could be confusing to someone. 
	o  Payload Security
		replace "an" with "a"
	o  Proof of Possession (PoP) 
		My suggested reword:
		Performing an action with a private key to demonstrate
		possession of it. An example is to create a signature using a
		registered private signing key, to prove possession of it. 
		
3.  2.1 Universality and Usability
	Item #12
		Use of word "excessive" - should we qualify this?

4.  2.2 Security Model
	Item #2
		replace "be encrypting using" with "use"
		replace "XML encryption" with "XML Encryption"

/Shivaram
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