- From: Susan Lesch <lesch@w3.org>
- Date: Wed, 15 Aug 2001 18:23:17 -0700
- To: www-svg@w3.org
Congratulations on your SVG Proposed Recommendation [1]. These are mainly
minor editorial comments. A few are repeated from the CR. Best wishes for
your project.
[1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2001/PR-SVG-20010719/
"font-size: 80%" is too small to read in Netscape 4 on a Mac. Maybe you
could make an adjustment ('small' might work). For example see the DTD:
http://www.w3.org/2001/01/screenshots/20010815-SVG1.png
The files will be 10% smaller if they had no indents (20% for files
with many tables). Please process with Tidy with indentation off
(http://www.w3.org/People/Raggett/tidy/).
In 5.1.1, the first example uses "http://someplace.org" which belongs
to someone. Please use IANA's example.org, example.com, or example.net
instead; this case illustrates why. See RFC 2606 section 3 at
http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc/rfc2606.txt
Globally, make each occurrence of "standalone" and "stand-alone" match.
W3C generally favors M-W which says it's hyphenated; American Heritage
says it is one word. Either is fine.
http://www.m-w.com/cgi-bin/dictionary?va=stand-alone
http://www.bartleby.com/61/17/S0701700.html
Also globally in the upper part of each section, omit the comma after
the month in "19 July, 2001".
From here down, a section number is followed by a quote and then a
suggestion or comment.
page one authors section
SVG 1.0 working group
SVG 1.0 Working Group
expanded TOC 1.2
Macintosh filetype
Macintosh file type
1.2
lower case (four times)
lowercase
filetype
file type
Did Apple reserve "svg " and "svgz"? Ordinarily, they reserve
lowercase file types for their use.
1.6 clipping path
absense of antialiasing
absence of anti-aliasing
2.1
an XML Namespace.
an XML namespace.
maximise
maximize
4.1 <paint>
The available options and syntax for <paint> is
The available options and syntax for <paint> are
4.2 [for each color keyword name]
</span>)</td>
)</span></td>
4.2
The SVGColor corresponds to color value definition for
The SVGColor interface corresponds to the color value definition for
The SVGICCColor expresses
The SVGICCColor interface expresses
The SVGRenderingIntent defines
The SVGRenderingIntent interface defines
5.3.1
"...Invalid references represent an error (see Error processing) in
all cases except for the xlink:href attribute on the 'a' element
when either of the following is true:"
Do you mean when either is "false"? Also, the "xlink:href" link is
broken.
http://www.w3.org/TR/2001/PR-SVG-20010719/linking.html#linking.html#AElementXLinkHrefAttribute
5.8.3 (three times)
capabililities
capabilities
5.9
URI Reference
URI reference
6.2.1
a particular style sheet languages
a particular style sheet language
In 7.2, two paragraphs are almost identical. They could say instead:
The width attribute on the outermost 'svg' element establishes the
viewport's width, unless:
* the SVG content is a separately stored resource that is embedded
by reference (such as the 'object' element in [XHTML]), or the SVG
content is embedded inline within a containing document;
* and the referencing element or containing document is styled using
CSS [CSS2] or XSL [XSL];
* and there are CSS-compatible positioning properties [CSS2-POSN]
specified on the referencing element (e.g., the 'object' element)
or on the containing document's outermost 'svg' element that are
sufficient to establish the width of the viewport.
Under these conditions, the positioning properties establish the
viewport's width.
Similarly, if there are positioning properties [CSS2-POSN] specified on
the referencing element or the on the outermost 'svg' that are
sufficient to establish the height of the viewport, then these
positioning properties establish the viewport's height; otherwise, the
height attribute on the outermost 'svg' element establishes the
viewport's height.
7.11
pecentages
percentages
7.12 SVGTransform
e and f represents
e and f represent
a and d represents
a and d represent
8.3.1
a period (".")
a full stop (".") or dot (".")
see http://www.unicode.org/charts/PDF/U0000.pdf
(=PERIOD means the name is outdated.)
8.3.6, 8.3.7 and eight times in 8.5
Bezier
Bézier
10.3
Ideographic
ideographic
western, northern indic and far-eastern scripts
Western, Northern Indic and Far-Eastern scripts
there is are two
there are two
10.7.3 and several times in 10.9.2
User Agent
user agent
10.9.2
Open Type
OpenType
10.11
auto-kerning is disable
auto-kerning is disabled
In 10.14, x, dx and rotate are run-on sentences. You could
break them after "ignored." I used a full stop.
The <coordinate> values are processed in the same manner as the x
attribute on the 'tspan' element, with the following exception:
If the referenced alternate glyphs are rendered instead of the
Unicode characters inside the 'altGlyph' element, then any
absolute X coordinates specified via an x attribute on this
element or any ancestor 'text' or 'tspan' elements for Unicode
characters 2 through <n> within the 'altGlyph' element are
ignored. Any absolute X coordinate specified via an x
attribute on this element or any ancestor 'text' or 'tspan'
elements for the first Unicode character within the 'altGlyph'
element sets a new absolute X coordinate for the current text
position before rendering the first alternate glyph.
10.15
"...The fragments below show two pairs of equivalent 'text' elements.
Each pair consists of two equivalent 'text' elements, with the
first 'text' element using xml:space='default' and the second
using xml:space='preserve'."
The only difference between examples is the character data (not the
markup as the prose indicates).
examplenon-indented
example non-indented
12.3.2
a 'color-profile' elements
a 'color-profile' element
12.3.3
user-agent
user agent
14.1
absense
absence
antialiasing (twice)
anti-aliasing
14.3.1 and 14.3.5
antialiasing
anti-aliasing
15.2
In MacIE5, the line numbers are off by one in the example. It's fairly
easy to understand anyway though.
Also in 15.2, the last two items (5 and 6) in the ordered list are in
p's which can be removed (to make the items' vertical spacing match).
15.6
Example enable-background-01 illustrate
Example enable-background-01 illustrates
15.7.1
primtives
primitives
assembed
assembled
16.3
SVG document such that they
SVG documents such that they
19.2.1
working group (twice)
Working Group
In 19.2.6, after "In the syntax specifications that follow," you could
say this sentence once (it appears 28 times on one page): "Except for
any SVG-specific rules explicitly mentioned in this specification, the
normative definition for this attribute is the SMIL Animation
[SMILANIM] specification." Then cut the "In particular" from each link
to SMIL Animation.
19.2.7 (six times)
Bezier
Bézier
19.2.12
the x- and y-axis
the x- and y-axes
19.2.14
tranformation (twice)
transformation
20.7
unicode ranges (twice)
unicode-ranges (or Unicode ranges)
20.8.3
wider,narrower
wider, narrower
21.1
Metadata is no longer a W3C Activity. Please don't link to its Activity
statement. You could link to the Semantic Web Activity statement.
http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/Activity
B.1
end of corresponding chapter
end of corresponding chapters
B.6.4
Why is the Representation column marked up <code> for 'baseline-shift',
'font' and 'marker' and not the others?
F.4
When out-of-range values are provided, but the user agent
When out-of-range values are provided, the user agent
F.7
links..
links.
F.8.
device such as a printer which do not support
device such as a printer which does not support
G.6
Transcoders ..., such as an SVG-to-raster transcoder, represents
Transcoders ..., such as an SVG-to-raster transcoder, represent
G.7
"...Once the guidelines are completed, a future version of this
specification is likely to require conformance to the Priority 1
guidelines in Conforming SVG Viewers."
UAAG doesn't mention SVG. Do you mean that Conforming SVG Viewers are
likely to be required to conform to these Priority 1 guidelines?
J.
HTTP 1.1
HTTP/1.1
K.2 under [FOLEY-VANDAM]
James D.
James D. Foley
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