Comments for Media queries 20020123

These are minor comments for your "Media queries" Last Call Working
Draft [1] to use as you see fit.

It would help a lot if the title was Media Queries rather than Media
queries. In running text, one could think that the title is Media
unless the writer added quotation marks. Also "CSS" or "CSS3" in the
title might help readers know what they are about to read.

Globally, s/User Agent/user agent/

In the status section, s/Style activity/Style Activity/

In 1, add a link to [HTML40] after HTML4, section 6.13 for people who
print.

In 2, the bullet items are sentences and can be capitalized and have
ending periods.

In 3.1, s/Media Queries../Media Queries./

In 3.1, add a link to [CCPP] before the two links to CC/PP and add a
reference for people who print. The link to RFC 2534 could link to a
reference [RFC2534] not to the RFC.

In 3.3, link to a reference [RFC2506].

In 4 and 5, please do not mention http://style.com/color. Per RFC 2606,
use the domains example.com, example.org, and example.net for all
examples. IANA reserves them for this purpose. If you need an evocative
name, use a machine name (e.g., http://cats.example.org).

In 4, you could break this long sentence:
     A media query is true if the media type of the media query matches
     the media type of the device where the User Agent is running (the
     User Agent is responsible for knowing which one of the defined
     media types which most closely resembles the device), and all
     expressions in the media query are true.
maybe like this:
     A media query is true if the media type of the media query
     matches the media type of the device where the user agent is
     running, and all expressions in the media query are true. (The
     user agent is responsible for knowing which one of the defined
     media types most closely resembles the device.)

In 5, is this true for XHTML selectors? "CSS style sheets are generally
case-insensitive, and this is also the case for media queries."

In 5, s/The parenthesis ("()")/The parentheses ("()")/ and
s/without the parenthesis/without the parentheses/

In 5, add a link to [CSS2] after the link to CSS2 for people who print.

In 6.6 link to a reference [RFC2531].

In 6.6, s/provide more specific/provides more specific/

In 8, s/the W3C Working Group on Cascading Style Sheets and
Formatting Properties/the W3C Working Group on Cascading Style Sheets/
(I think.)

In 8, Duerst comes after Diaz.

In 8, make the reference titles the link; (the URI should be plain
text). (See the last paragraph in section 9.5 of
http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#References .)

In 8, why make HTML 4.0 a reference rather than HTML 4.01?

[1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2002/WD-css3-mediaqueries-20020123/

Best wishes for your project,
-- 
Susan Lesch           http://www.w3.org/People/Lesch/
mailto:lesch@w3.org               tel:+1.858.483.4819
World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)    http://www.w3.org/

Received on Monday, 4 February 2002 01:46:22 UTC