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Comments for WD-rdf-schema-20030123

From: Susan Lesch <lesch@w3.org>
Date: Sun, 23 Feb 2003 21:50:37 -0800
Message-Id: <p05111b01ba7f602e3f40@[192.168.123.158]>
To: www-rdf-comments@w3.org

These are minor editorial comments for your "RDF Vocabulary Description
Language 1.0: RDF Schema" Last Call Working Draft [1].

Regarding the title, "the role of the RDF vocabulary description
language, RDF Schema," please choose one name and keep it capitalized.

minor typos, some global:
s/working drafts
s/URI-Reference/URI reference/
s/Working Group seek/Working Group seeks/
s/Ontology/ontology/
s/whilst/while/
s/defininition/definition/

At least in US English, the plural of vocabulary is vocabularies.

 From the Abstract:
     This specification describes how to use RDF to describe RDF
     vocabularies. This specification defines a vocabulary for this
     purpose and defines other built-in RDF vocabulary initially
     specified in the RDF Model and Syntax Specification.
could say:
     This specification describes how to use RDF to describe RDF
     vocabularies. This specification defines a vocabulary for this
     purpose and defines other built-in RDF vocabulary initially
     specified in the RDF Model and Syntax Specification.

I would cut the first 9 or so paragraphs in the Introduction if
possible.

[1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/WD-rdf-schema-20030123/

Best wishes for your project,
-- 
Susan Lesch           http://www.w3.org/People/Lesch/
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