Re: Outline of Boston presentation

I like it. The original version was basically just words lifted from the 
documents, and the writing style was less appropriate for a presentation.

By the way, since I missed the second half of the discussion, I would 
appreciate seeing a draft of the minutes.

Thanks...

Lofton Henderson wrote:

>
> Patrick et al,
>
> I have some suggestions about the OpsGL slide.  While my suggestion 
> doesn't change what it basically says, it does change the style 
> somewhat.  You may prefer the old style, but having edited on OpsGL so 
> much (too much!), I think it's refreshing to see some different words 
> for a change.
>
> By the way, this is in the context of our decision at Tuesday telecon, 
> to move this slide to last (or near last), so that we can end with 
> some immediately actionable "punch".
>
> Current
> -----
>
> At 12:54 PM 2/17/03 -0800, Patrick Curran wrote:
>
>> [...]
>>
>> * Operations Guidelines (think QA)
>>
>>   Appoint a QA lead
>>   Integrate QA into Working Group activities
>>   Define and allocate resources for QA activities
>>   Synchronize QA activities with the specification milestones
>>   Define the QA process
>>   Plan for development, publication, maintenance of test materials
>
>
> Proposed revision
> -----
> (see styling notes after outline).
>
> * Operations Guidelines (think QA)
>
> Appoint a QA lead
> INTEGRATE IT -- commit to QA goals and scenario.
> STAFF IT -- assess and assign appropriate staffing
> COORDINATE IT -- synchronize QA and specification deliverables
> PLAN IT -- the process for development, publication, maintenance
> MAKE IT EASY -- use OpsGL's @@charter template@@ and @@process template@@
>
> About styling.  I don't advocate upper-case.  But some styling to 
> emphasize the words that I have put in upper case.  In the last slide, 
> the "@@" bracketed phrases would link to those templates.
>
> As I said, this is really a matter of style.  You could use the 
> current words on the slide, and talk the latter words.  Or use the 
> proposed words on the slide and talk the current words (or some 
> hybrid).  My own preference is for the latter. Opinions?
>
> Also, I'm sure the words can be improved.  This was a quick draft.
>
> More later (about feedback slide),
> -Lofton.
>

Received on Wednesday, 19 February 2003 19:13:33 UTC