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From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
Date: Mon, 29 Aug 2011 15:08:50 -0500
Message-ID: <4E5BF1D2.6000608@w3.org>
To: Dick Wayne <wayneedick@gmail.com>
CC: wai-eo-editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
  -------- Original Message --------
Subject: 	RE: First Draft: Slidy Help
Date: 	Mon, 29 Aug 2011 15:24:31 -0400
From: 	Char James-Tanny <charjt@helpstuff.com>
Organization: 	JTF Associates, Inc.
To: 	<wed@csulb.edu>
CC: 	Shawn Lawton Henry <shawn@w3.org>



Hi, Wayne :-)

Wow...nice job! Sorry I didn't get to this sooner (especially after you put
it out so quickly). I have some comments (probably not very tactful, so I'll
apologize now).

- I'm confused as to who the target audience is. I thought it was for people
using Slidy (that is, viewing the presentation on the web), but it looks
like it's for the speaker. The wording could be modified to cover both at
the same time.
- It looks weird on my system because I customize my browsers to show me
flaws in my CSS. So I'm getting black text on a brown background; headings
are Comic Sans, text is Arial/Verdana/some basic serif font (which is fine);
there isn't enough differentiation in heading sizes; left margin of bullets
is outside the left margin of the headings. This makes it harder for me to
analyze the structure, although overall it looks OK.
- There shouldn't be colons after any heading.
- For the most part, the bulleted lists are OK (because there are various
options that one can use to navigate through the slides, so they shouldn't
be numbered steps). But bullets are used incorrectly under "Webpage or
Slideshow View".actually, there shouldn't be any except for the two that
start "If you are in.". And "Press F11" should not use a bullet (under "Full
Screen or Normal View") because there's no second option. (Whenever there's
only one option, a regular paragraph should be used.)
- There are a couple of places where I'd add commas. (This is fairly typical
for me ;-) )
- Some sentences need some slight editing. Eg, "If your slides have footers
pressing "F" will show or hide them. (next bullet) Only works in slideshow
view." I'd change the heading to "Show / Hide Footers in Slideshow View"
(from "Show / Hide Footers"), and I'd change the sentence to "If the slides
have footers, press "F" to show or hide them." (And there shouldn't be any
bullets.)
- For ">  character" and "+ character", I'd consider adding "Shift+." and
"Shift+=".
- I'd put "for bigger" and "for smaller" (under "Increase font size" and
"Decrease font size") in parentheses.
- Heading capitalization is inconsistent.
- Space is missing between some words in a couple of places.

Let me know if you have any questions. If you want, I can make some of the
edits if you send me the file.

Char

>  -----Original Message-----
>  From: w3c-wai-eo-request@w3.org [mailto:w3c-wai-eo-request@w3.org]
>  On Behalf Of Wayne Dick
>  Sent: Monday, August 22, 2011 4:03 PM
>  To: EOWG (E-mail)
>  Subject: First Draft: Slidy Help
>
>  Hi,
>
>  To my subcommittee and everyone else too.
>
>  Here is my first draft.
>
>  http://www.csulb.edu/~wed/public/SlidyHelp/
>
>  I'm looking forward to comments.
>
>  Wayne
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