Training Resource Suite Comments

Unfortunately, I couldn't add all my comments to the questionnaire as  
I was getting an error from the server. Here is the rest of my comments.

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<http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/topics.html>
This document includes a comprehensive set of topics and it is well  
written. You can find some comments below:

     *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: opening paragraph, second sentence
     * current wording: "Other parts of this resource provide  
Presentation Outlines and a Training Outline that use these topics"
     * suggested revision: "Other parts of this resource provide  
Presentation Outlines and a *Workshop* Outline that use these topics"
     * rationale: The link label says training but it is linked to a  
page that uses workshop in the title, so to be consistent I would  
change that to workshop.

     *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: topics in general
     * current wording: Most of the topics currently focus on  
developers, advocates, etc, but I wonder if some presentation topics  
can be added targeting end users (training end users)
     * suggested revision: For example, "How to complain? or how to  
contact organisations about their inaccessible web sites?", or  
"Better Web Browsing <http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/adaptive/ 
strategies.html>"
     * rationale: people in training end users might find these  
topics useful.

    *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: topics in general
     * current wording: Managing Accessibility topics
     * suggested revision: What about adding another topic that  
discusses the relationship between Search Engine Optimisation and  
Accessibility
     * rationale: I think there are a lot of people interested in  
search engine optimisation.

   *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: "Tips and suggestiins" section in all topics
     * current wording: All the tip sections are organised around  
"demonstration, question, tip, activity"
     * suggested revision: I suggest to highlight this categorisation
     * rationale: To improve scan-ability

  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: "What the audience will learn" section in all topics
     * current wording: In some topics, it says "know where to get  
more information"
     * suggested revision: I suggest to add this to all topics or may  
be consider to add this to most of them
     * rationale: From what I can see from all the topics discussed  
this would be a learning outcome in all, or may be in most of them.

   *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 1, "What the audience will learn" section
     * current wording: "Know about international efforts to ensure  
web accessibility"
     * suggested revision: I suggest to drop this
     * rationale: I cannot see how the audience will learn about this  
by looking at the rest of the topic discussion

   *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 3, "Goal" section
     * current wording: "Introduction to WAI's three sets of  
guidelines that contribute to an an accessible web."
     * suggested revision: "Introduction to WAI's three sets of  
guidelines that contribute to an accessible web."
     * rationale: "an" is repeated.

   *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 3, "Tips and suggestions" section
     * current wording:
     * suggested revision: Add a discussion point: "Ask participants  
to think about the key players in Web interaction: what are the key  
players in Web interaction? Is it enough to make one of them  
accessible?"
     * rationale: This will get the participants think and visualise  
the key players in mind and also enable them to conclude themselves  
that accessibility has to be considered as a whole with all these key  
components in mind.

  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 9, "Tips and suggestions" section
     * current wording:
     * suggested revision: Add a discussion point: "Ask participants  
to think what an authoring tool is, what would be the best way to  
define an authoring tool, would they consider some web sites as  
authoring tools?"
     * rationale: These questions will enable the participants to see  
that Web authoring is not only about CMS, it is also about web sites  
that can used to contribute content, etc.

  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 10, "Tips and suggestions" section
     * current wording:
     * suggested revision: Add a demonstration point: "Show a before  
and after demo, for example show how a slider/drag and drop or  
navigation item used before ARIA and after with ARIA"
     * rationale: I think this would be a good demonstration of  
benefits of using ARIA

  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 11, "Resources" section
     * current wording:
     * suggested revision: Add WAI resources that show the  
relationship between mobile Web and accessible Web
     * rationale: Since mobile web is used as a demonstration item

  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 12, "what the audience will learn" section
     * current wording:
     * suggested revision: I suggest revising and shortening the list  
of learning outcomes
     * rationale: I think based on the description of this topic, the  
learning outcomes listed there look ambitious to me.

  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 15, "audience" section
     * current wording: Web developers; procurement personnel; web  
policy makers
     * suggested revision: I think Topic 11 audience can also be  
added here "Web accessibility advocates, web site managers and other  
management staff who need data to inform decisions about the return  
on web accessibility investment"
     * rationale: The relationship can be used to show the business  
case for accessibility


  *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: Topic 15, "Handouts" section
     * current wording: there is no handouts section
     * suggested revision: I think this resource could be added to  
the handouts section: "http://www.w3.org/2007/02/ 
mwbp_flip_cards.html" and also WCAG 2.0 at a glance "http:// 
www.w3.org/WAI/flyer/Overview.html#glance"
     * rationale: Could be useful to handout in the presentation
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<http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/workshop-outlines.html>
     *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: "Overview" section, "Target audience"
     * current wording: All 3 days...Days 1 and 2...Day 1...
     * suggested revision: I would re-order them so "Day 1...Day  
2...All 3 days..."
     * rationale: starting from first day would be easier to see the  
focus


     *  priority: editor's discretion
     * location: "Overview" section, "Target audience"
     * current wording: Website developers, application programmers,  
Web authors, visual designers, non-technical developers (used in the  
other parts of the document)
     * suggested revision: I think it would be good to briefly define  
these somewhere
     * rationale: In the rest of the document, these terms are used  
quite a lot in the audiences part, and I personally found it hard to  
see the differences
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Regards,
Yeliz
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