Training suite Part III -- Example Outlines for Web Accessibility Presentations

EOWG Editors:

Here are my five comments on:

Part III. Example Outlines for Web Accessibility Presentations 
http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/presentation-outlines.html
[Editor's draft in progress - updated 11 August 2010]

Again, Andrew, no need to comment on my comments.

Hope they're helpful.

Jennifer

3.1. "Introduce aspects of
[JS: add the] [link] business case
  that are most relevant to your audience such as


3.2. Generally, it might help to eliminate (when the meaning will be 
accurate) the use of the word "some." It makes it sound like what's 
being covered here in the outlines isn't comprehensive when it often 
may be. "Some" makes it sound like we're not telling the whole story, 
and it makes some of the action-steps sound a little weaker to me.

3.3. It might be a good idea to note that several links in here (and 
perhaps elsewhere throughout the Training suite) are cited as 
"Draft." I imagine there will be a mechanism to make sure the links 
are updated when these documents move out of their "Draft" 
state.  This may be worth noting in the log for future updates.

3.4. "Show the "before" parts of
[JS: add the] [link] Before and After Demonstration

3.5. Maybe it would be a good idea to move this:
"Advance reading for students" to the beginning of this presentation 
outline so it won't be missed.  It feels sort of buried.

Received on Friday, 20 August 2010 13:53:51 UTC