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Re: editorial content of "benefits"

From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
Date: Wed, 24 Sep 2008 11:16:14 -0500
Message-ID: <48DA67CE.10508@w3.org>
To: William Loughborough <wloughborough@gmail.com>
CC: wai-eo-editors@w3.org, srush@knowbility.org

Hi William,

Thanks for the review & comment. A couple of things:

1. Note from the previous e-mail: "Although we agreed on the content some time ago, it's common to see new things when you look at it again. However, we don't have much time to spend on this now. Therefore, if you have suggestions for content changes, please do send them in and *include an indication of how important you think it is to change*."

2. Keep in mind that projected text should be extremely "terse" and need not stand alone, as it supports what the speaker says.

3. See additional comments below. If you still think changes are needed, please provide suggested changes.

Thanks,
~Shawn

William Loughborough wrote:
> The bulleted items in:
> 
> WCAG 2 gives you
> Cooperatively developed international standard
> Applies to more advanced technologies
> Clearer criteria
> Flexible, adaptable
> Practical implementation examples and info
> 
> should all be nouns - the second and fourth are a verb and adjectives.

Why should they all be nouns?

> Also
> 
> What WCAG 2 gives you
> Applies to more advanced technologies
> -current, future, non-W3C
> 
> needs grammar adjustment
> 
> As does
> 
> WCAG 2 gives you
> Clearer "success criteria,"
> more precisely testable
> (still need human Judgement)
> 
> - they don't "read right" as they are now.

"WCAG 2 gives you" is a heading repeated on several slides. It is not intended to be the first part of a sentence for these slides.

(although, personally, I think this one does read right as slide shorthand for the sentence: "WCAG 2 gives you clearer success criteria and it is more precisely testable (although you still need human judgment)."

> and then
> 
> The WCAG 2.0 success criteria is more specific and testable.

um, yah, well, it's more like the *concept* (of the SC) is more testable. But I am quite happy to change "is" to "are" here. (as soon as I download it from my backup...)

> Even though many of us don't care about the "number" thing, humor an old 
> man and adjust. Criteria "ARE"... and when there's only one it's a 
> "criterion", please!
> 
> Then
> 
> WCAG 2 gives you
> Adaptable, flexible
> for different situations,
> and developing
> technologies and techniques
> 
> begs for completion: adaptable, flexible WHAT?

This is slide shorthand for "WCAG 2.0 is adaptable and flexible for different situations, and for developing technologies and techniques."

> Love.
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