Re: For Review: Accessibility page for beta.w3.org

Hi Shawn,

I like the Why/What/How order. The overall document looks pretty good to 
me now. A few comments for consideration:

# Intro Para.1 "... location, or physical or mental ability. 
Accessibility focuses on this last aspect, and overlaps with the others"
Is there a danger that some might read "this last aspect" to just mean 
"mental ability"? Maybe the sentence could be "Accessibility focuses on 
this last aspect - ability - and overlaps with the others"

# Intro Para.2 "When websites and web tools are not accessible, they 
disable people." I keep wanting to say "... disable people from x & y" 
Could we say "When websites and web tools are not accessible, they 
cause/create disability for people."?

# Intro Listing - I know it comes from the template for these pages, but 
having the list titled "Learn more below" and then a list item of "learn 
more" strikes me as odd. Could we title the list "Find out more below"?

# alt-text example - removing mention of visual browsers and tool-tips 
is good

# Learn More - would it be better to link the guideline names and 
acronyms (not just the acronyms)? I find the acronym link gets lost 
visually at the rhs.

# Use It - maybe "How PWD use the Web", the "WCAG Overview" page and 
then "Managing" and "Evaluating"? (I'm thinking understand it link, then 
three links about doing it.)

Cheers, Andrew

---
Andrew Arch
Web Accessibility and Ageing Specialist
http://www.w3.org/People/Andrew/
http://www.w3.org/WAI/WAI-AGE/

Shawn Henry wrote:
> EOWG,
> 
> The draft Accessibility page for beta.w3.org has been updated based on 
> Friday's EOWG discussion.
> 
> * Latest draft: 
> http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/4betaW3org/accessibility-new-w3c
> * Analysis & Changelog: 
> http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/changelogs/cl-2009-w3c-site-redesign
> * Important background: in e-mail forwarded below
> 
> Please send comments to the mailing list early this week, as we 
> discussed in the teleconference.
> * Comments for discussion: w3c-wai-eo@w3.org
> * Typos and the like: wai-eo-editors@w3.org
> 
> Regards,
> ~Shawn
> 
> 
> 
> -------- Original Message --------
> Subject: Accessibility page for beta.w3.org
> Date: Tue, 18 Aug 2009 17:17:35 -0500
> From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
> To: EOWG (E-mail) <w3c-wai-eo@w3.org>
> 
> EOWG,
> 
> New rough concept drafts of the Accessibility page for beta.w3.org are 
> now available. *These are rough, unapproved ideas for discussion*. 
> Please focus on overall issues (not detailed "wordsmithing") and realize 
> these are individuals' ideas that are no where near agreement or 
> completion.
> 
> Please use the Analysis and Changelog page as your main page for this 
> work. It is: http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/changelogs/cl-2009-w3c-site-redesign
> 
> * See that the goals and audiences are different from most of the WAI 
> pages.
> 
> * The first link is to the Accessibility page - latest version.
> 
> * Right under there are links to examples HTML & CSS, 
> Internationalization. Skimming through those you can see the type of 
> information we might want to cover. Also note that much of the wrapper 
> is a template defined by the W3C website redesign.
> 
> * Previous drafts, links to minutes, email threads, and such are under 
> "References and version notes". There are three very different drafts 
> since last Friday:
> - "17 Aug 2009 draft - a universality experimental version" is playing 
> with the broader view of universality. Note that we are not planning to 
> make this shift, yet the draft was an interesting exercise based on the 
> 14 EOWG teleconference discussion.
> - "18 Aug 2009 draft L - the minimalist version" is another perspective 
> resulting from that discussion. (note that, while eloquent, this one 
> doesn't use the current beta.w3.org template design, as noted in 
> previous email)
> - "14-18 Aug EOWG mailing list archives" has several e-mails that are 
> relevant, with subject "Re: stab at betaw3"
> 
> Please look over these drafts, and the latest at 
> http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/4betaW3org/accessibility-new-w3c
> 
> Feel free to send comments to the list and/or prepare for discussion at 
> the upcoming EOWG teleconference.
> 
> Regards,
> ~Shawn
> 
> 
> -----
> Shawn Lawton Henry
> W3C Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
> e-mail: shawn@w3.org
> phone: +1.617.395.7664
> about: http://www.w3.org/People/Shawn/
> 
> 
>

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