[ Rough/Incomplete Draft! ] EOWG Comments on ATAG 2.0 Last Call Working Draft

EOWG,

Following is a *Rough & Incomplete Draft* of our comments on the ATAG 2.0 
Last Call Working Draft from last week. Remember that the comments are due 
to AUWG by next Tuesday, 18 January, so we need to finish our discussion on 
this in the EOWG teleconference today, 14 January.

Please consider these among any additional comments that you may be raising 
following your review of ATAG 2.0 this week.

These are all DRAFT comments on the document at:
         <http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-ATAG20-20041122/>http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-ATAG20-20041122/
for which the Call for Review is available at:
         http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/w3c-wai-ig/2004OctDec/0221.html

1. Build more plain-language clarification into the first few paragraphs of 
the Introduction, so that readers have more of an idea what ATAG is within 
the first few sentences of the Introduction. Right now the first sentence 
seems fairly abstract and does not give a clear idea of what the document is.

2. Check for understandability of the writing throughout the whole 
Introduction section, particularly focusing on the sequence of what is 
stated, and where it's explained. Right now these do not seem to flow clearly.

3. This ATAG document doesn't seem to sufficiently differentiate itself 
from WCAG, even though there is a section addressing this.

4. The status section is very long. There is some redundant information, 
and some information that seems more appropriate for an Introduction than 
for a Status section.

That is as far as we got with our discussion last week.


- Judy


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