Re: ACTION-767: Review references etc.

Magnus

Thanks for this review.

I assume we will update the XML Signature 1.1, XML Encryption 1.1, Generic Hybrid Cipher and XML Signature Properties references as part of the publication process.

I've updated the NFC reference, and as I mentioned I did not see an ANSI X.952 direct reference (which is why we went with the sub-optimal home page reference).

Now that I look at it I can update the XML Encryption draft, the explain, and generic hybrid ciphers draft.

I'll have to look at the issues with the requirements draft. However, can you please look at the requirements to see that they are all met in XML Encryption 1.1 and XML Signature 1.1, and also to see if there are any changes in Encryption that should have been documented in the requirements draft?

Thanks

regards, Frederick

Frederick Hirsch
Nokia



On Jan 17, 2011, at 11:54 AM, ext Magnus Nystrom wrote:

> Frederick, All,,
> This is in response to ACTION-767 assigned to me last week.
> 
> I don't know where the references are stored any longer so I have not done any changes in the sources themselves but I did note the following:
> 
> XML Encryption 1.1:
> -------------------------
> - The reference for NFC: The URL should be preceded by the string "URL:" as for other references
> - The reference for ANSI X9.52 should be linked as the reference for ANSI X9.44. As it is right now, one only gets to the generic ANSI home page.
> - The link to XML Signature Syntax and Processing Version 1.1 will need to be updated eventually; same for XML Encryption Syntax and Processing 1.1.
> - For [ECC-ALGS], we should check if it has been given an RFC number yet. I will follow up on this. I believe it should still be informative in this document.
> 
> Outside of the references:
> - Section 5.1.1: Should probably be consistent in how we reference the "with"/"omit" comments; sometimes we write "(omit comments)" and sometimes "with comments" (i.e. without parenthesis) and sometimes "comments" is spelled with a capital "C".
> - Section 8.2, replace "they will be" with "there will be"
> 
> Explain:
> -----------
> - My affiliation should be changed to Microsoft.
> - 3.3: Change "Clarify" to "Clarified that"
> - 5.4.2: That change is not relative to 1.0 and so I am not sure it should be in here.
> - "Message Authentication ..." - change "200900602" to "20090602"
> - 8.2: Change description of first change to: "Changed "MIME media type name" to " Type name" and "MIME subtype name" to "Subtype name"
> 
> Generic Hybrid Ciphers:
> -----------------------------
> - Section 9, "Acknowledgements" is empty; in line with the other documents I suggest removing this section altogether and instead creating a Section 1.2 "Acknowledgements" with the following text:
> 
> The contributions of the following Working Group members to this specification are gratefully acknowledged in accordance with the contributor policies and the active WG roster: Frederick Hirsch, Brian LaMacchia, Thomas Roessler, Magnus Nyström, Bruce Rich, Scott Cantor, Hal Lockhart, Cynthia Martin, Ed Simon, Pratik Datta and Meiko Jensen.
> 
> Additionally, we thank Burt Kaliski of EMC for his comments during and subsequent to Last Call.
> 
> - In Appendix A, the URL to [XMLENC-CORE1] and [XMLDSIG-CORE1] should be updated, eventually, just as for XML Encryption 1.1.
> 
> Requirements
> -----------------
> (I was not sure what to do here, but I did check the references section as per below:)
> - [C14N-REQS]: The URL is different between the hyperlink in the title and the explicit URL.
> - [C14N11]: Same as previous comment
> - [EXI]: Missing hyperlink in title
> - [Gajek]: Missing hyperlink in title
> - [Infoset]: Missing hyperlink in title
> - [McIntoshAustel] - Missing URL altogether. A possible URL is: http://portal.acm.org/citation.cfm?doid=1103022.1103026
> - PKCS #5: Missing hyperlink in title
> - RFC 2633 is obsoleted by RFC 3851
> - SigProp: Different URL for title than for explicit URL.
> - XMLDsig2nd: Missing hyperlink in title
> 
> Best,
> -- Magnus
> 
>

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