Re: wsc-xit: Please review for publication.

I've just committed an editor's draft that makes these changes.
I'll produce a /TR-ready version in half an hour, and install that
then.
-- 
Thomas Roessler, W3C  <tlr@w3.org>






On 2007-10-30 14:05:40 +0100, Thomas Roessler wrote:
> From: Thomas Roessler <tlr@w3.org>
> To: Mary Ellen Zurko <Mary_Ellen_Zurko@notesdev.ibm.com>
> Cc: WSC WG <public-wsc-wg@w3.org>
> Date: Tue, 30 Oct 2007 14:05:40 +0100
> Subject: Re: wsc-xit: Please review for publication.
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> On 2007-10-30 08:27:06 -0400, Mary Ellen Zurko wrote:
> 
> > Are the "(normative)"'s in titles accurate and comprehensive?
> > They seem almost random. For example, I checked 6.1.1, which
> > doesn't have one on the title, but seems like it should be. Sure
> > enough, the first comment is that it is normative. It's confusing
> > the way it is; make them all title comments or all comments after
> > the title. 
> 
> I'll make them all comments after the title, as that's faster.
> 
> > "To complement the interaction and decision related parts of this
> > specification, 8 Robustness addresses the question how the
> > communication of context information needed to make decisions can
> > be made more robust against attacks." grammar - Shouldn't that be
> > "addresses the question of how..."?
> 
> Not sure; I defer to the native speaker.
> 
> > I have a number of personal quibbles with the status of the
> > proposal, but those are not pertinent to this review. 
> 
> +1 to the quibbles :)
> 
> > Nice example formatting. 
> 
> Not my creation.
> 
> > In 7.3, "petname" is in a sense a forward reference to the
> > definition in 7.4. It would be useful if there was some way to
> > signal that. 
> 
> There's now a "Definition" around the second occurence, and the
> first one is a link.
> 
> > > - Dropped in the Page Security Score.
> 
> > Ditto on the personal quibbles, but looks good in terms of going
> > out for FPWD. 
> 
> +1 to both
> 
> -- 
> Thomas Roessler, W3C  <tlr@w3.org>
> 
>

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