Re: WPDS blog post

Thanks for the updated link, Jay.

Generally, it reads very nicely. I don't have blog edit privs, so here are
my nitpicks:

First para wants a preposition in "for famous" as in "for the famous"

Second para makes a reference to the Adobe WP team blog post, but the link
is missing.

Third heading "Sun, fun plus" should get another comma "Sun, fun, plus".

First focus below that group should add a comma after Michael Kühnel
<http://docs.webplatform.org/wiki/User:Mkuehnel>

Third focus group: "focussed" should be "focused" (according to my US
English browser dict).

Fourth focus group should add a comma after "Screen Orientation API
<http://docs.webplatform.org/wiki/apis/screen_orientation>".

Fifth focus group might change "two new pages have been" to "and two new
pages were".

Under Thanks I'd add a comma after David Kirstein
<http://docs.webplatform.org/wiki/User:Frozenice>.

I'm not getting the images to pull up cleanly. The links have "?e0086e"
after the .jpg.

That's it. Hope this helps.

DougM
(Doug May)


On Fri, May 30, 2014 at 12:03 AM, Andre Jay Meissner <ameissne@adobe.com>
wrote:

>  My bad, shared the wrong link. Here you go:
>
>  http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=991&preview=1&_ppp=fc0c361a33
>
>  Feedback in the next 3-4 hours much appreciated. Thanks,
> *Jay
>
>
>
>   Von: Roberto Borges <roberto.borges@outlook.com>
> Datum: KW 22 | Donnerstag, 29. Mai 2014 14:57
> An: Andre Jay Meissner <ameissne@adobe.com>
> Betreff: RE: WPDS blog post
>
>   Hi Andre,
>
>  I can't see this post, 404
>
>  http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=991&preview=true
>
>
> *Roberto *
>  ------------------------------
> From: ameissne@adobe.com
> To: public-webplatform@w3.org
> Date: Thu, 29 May 2014 07:51:59 +0000
> Subject: WPDS blog post
>
>
>  All,
>
>  the blog post on our last Doc Sprint is written and posted as draft.
> It’d be good to have this published tomorrow, Fri May 30, around noon my
> time (12 CET). Can I have your feedback until the end of today please?
>
>  http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=991&preview=true
>
>  This post focuses primarily focuses on the work output and documents any
> open ends. Together with this post I plan to publish a second post on the
> Adobe Web Platform team blog, each crosslinked to the other, focusing on
> fun stories around community members and some more pictures from the event.
>
>  Thanks,
> *Jay
>
>
>