- From: Chris Mills <cmills@w3.org>
- Date: Thu, 7 Feb 2013 14:11:40 +0000
- To: Doug Schepers <schepers@w3.org>
- Cc: public-webplatform@w3.org
Thanks Doug - I've fixed all of these except the title. I like the title, because I think it sounds human and down to earth, and not too stuffy and academic. I just like the comma, and don't think it sounds clumsy. Chris Mills Opera Software, dev.opera.com W3C Fellow, web education and webplatform.org Author of "Practical CSS3: Develop and Design" (http://goo.gl/AKf9M) On 7 Feb 2013, at 14:00, Doug Schepers <schepers@w3.org> wrote: > Hi, Chris- > > A few more comments... > > * "How we’re working, at WebPlatform.org" > This seems clumsy to me... I don't know if it's the comma, or what. Maybe "Workflow at Web Platform Docs" or "Getting Stuff Done at Web Platform Docs", or just removing the comma. > > * "discussion methods" > This link leads to [TEST:discuss]. Please move this page into the WPD namespaces, and link to it from [WPD:Index]. > > * "including IRC, and a mailing list" > Remove comma. Add link to mailing list archives. > > * "regular weekly meetings." -> > "regular weekly community meetings, simultaneously held on teleconference and IRC." > > * "such as announcing Doc Sprints" -> > "such as announcing in-person Doc Sprints" > > * "with subtasks." -> > "with subtasks and people assigned to complete them." > > * "The next Doc Sprint we have coming up is in Berlin, Germany" -> > "The next Doc Sprint we have coming up is in Berlin, Germany, this week" > > Regards- > -Doug > > On 2/7/13 6:47 AM, Chris Mills wrote: >> Cheers Peter - these were all great suggestions, and I've included >> most of them verbatim. >> >> The post is now published - see >> http://blog.webplatform.org/2013/02/how-were-working-at-webplatform-org/ >> >> Chris Mills Opera Software, dev.opera.com W3C Fellow, web education >> and webplatform.org Author of "Practical CSS3: Develop and Design" >> (http://goo.gl/AKf9M) >> >> On 6 Feb 2013, at 16:27, Peter Lubbers <peterlubbers@google.com> >> wrote: >> >>> Looks good, Chris. Some very minor suggestions for tightening up >>> the content. Feel free to ignore! >>> >>> Consider changing Moving forward with the huge amount of content >>> we’ve got was always going to be a challenge, especially as we are >>> but a few people, with a finite amount of time, many of us >>> volunteers. To: We knew it would be challenging to deal with this >>> much content, especially as we are mostly volunteers with only a >>> finite amount of time. >>> >>> Consider changing We’ve already achieved much, working towards our >>> goal of making WebPlatform.org the definitive client-side web >>> technology documentation site. But there is still much more to do, >>> which is why we opened it up to the wider community as an alpha. >>> To: We’ve already achieved much, working towards our goal of making >>> WebPlatform.org the definitive client-side web technology >>> documentation site, but there is still much more to do. That is why >>> we opened the site up to the wider community as an alpha. (The bold >>> "the" looks a little weird. consider italic) >>> >>> Consider paragraph break before "The plan was always" >>> >>> The sentence The plan was always to include the public as early as >>> possible, so more folks can join in and contribute. The web does >>> after all belong to all of us, and this is going to be such a great >>> tool, which will be useful to so many! does not read well How about >>> simply: The plan has always been to include the public as early as >>> possible. The web does, after all, belong to all of us. >>> >>> The text "For a start, we" leads me to think there will be a "Next, >>> we..." but it just becomes the bulleted list. Maybe just remove the >>> "For a start." >>> >>> Tighten the first bullet: To make the work more manageable, we have >>> started to split it into chunks, and then work on each in turn, >>> moving on to the next task when we have finished each one. Sounds >>> obvious, but it is so easy to become bogged down when you have so >>> much work to do. Maybe something like this: To make the work more >>> manageable, we have started to split it into manageable chunks and >>> we work on each item in turn. Sounds obvious, but it is so easy to >>> become bogged down when you have too much work to do. PL: Not sure >>> the last sentence "Sounds obvious..." adds very much. consider >>> dropping it. >>> >>> Drop comma in "who is working on each task, at" >>> >>> Stray bullet: * Get on with the tasks! >>> >>> Consider rewriting: We have a plan to get most pages relating to >>> these major areas sorted out in the next 2-3 months, but we need >>> your help! To: Our plan is to perfect the topic pages for these two >>> major areas over the next two to three months. This is where you >>> come in! >>> >>> Consider changing: bits of work To: focus areas >>> >>> >>> Regards, --Peter >>> >>> >>> On Wed, Feb 6, 2013 at 5:17 AM, Chris Mills <cmills@opera.com> >>> wrote: Hi all, >>> >>> I've put a draft of my webplatform blog post up at >>> http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=180&preview=true (How we're working, >>> at WebPlatform.org) >>> >>> Ok to publish this today or tomorrow? >>> >>> Chris Mills Opera Software, dev.opera.com W3C Fellow, web education >>> and webplatform.org Author of "Practical CSS3: Develop and Design" >>> (http://goo.gl/AKf9M) >>> >>> >>> >> >> >
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