- From: Steven Rowat <steven_rowat@sunshine.net>
- Date: Sat, 14 Dec 2013 18:53:15 -0800
- To: Web Payments CG <public-webpayments@w3.org>
On 12/14/13 5:25 PM, Joseph Potvin wrote: > http://www.projectmanagementhotel.com/documents/449 > http://www.projectmanagementhotel.com/attachments/6029/ERindex_conops_15dec2013PDF.pdf > > Just two pages are terribly dense, sorry. Would be very grateful > for feedback, brief or detailed, critical or otherwise. Joseph, Is there only that PDF? (I'm hoping for an HTML version). If so, I did find it too crammed to read (page leading, paragraph indents, space between paragraphs, etc.). If it was easy going, or not important, I wouldn't complain. But it seems to be both important and grammatically dense; it taxes my brain even if not crammed together so that it's physically hard to read. Example, the second sentence: "An ER Index is constructed from a selection of independently-verifiable geo-spatial time-series biophysical indicators that reflect relative trends in ecosystem integrity and resource availability." You've got a noun with *seven* adjective modifiers there (if you count the parts of the compound words), and as a naive reader I'll need all the help I can get not to bog down right there and bail out. In fact I did bail out. ;-) I apologize if it seems I'm being picky, but there's my feedback. :-) Steven Rowat
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