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Re: OWL Web Ontology Language Overview Editorial Comments

From: Deborah L. McGuinness <dlm@ksl.Stanford.EDU>
Date: Fri, 16 Jan 2004 11:01:30 -0800
Message-ID: <4008350A.4030804@ksl.stanford.edu>
To: "Lacy . Lee" <LLacy@drc.com>
Cc: public-webont-comments@w3.org
thank you for your very thorough reading and for the useful comments.
I wanted to acknowledge that we received the comments and I am 
integrating them.
I will send another message when my update based on your comments is 
complete.  The editors draft at
the normal place - 
http://www.ksl.stanford.edu/people/dlm/webont/OWLOverview.htm
has the work in progress.

Deborah

Lacy . Lee wrote:

> Deborah/Frank,
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> The Overview document is looking great and a lot of hard work has paid 
> off in this superb introduction.
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> I'd like to offer some very nitpicky editorial suggestions to help 
> polish this off:
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> Abstract, paragraph 2, fourth sentence, "for a more detailed 
> descriptions" to "for more detailed descriptions"
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> Table of Contents, under section 3, missing "10. OWL Lite Versioning"
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> Section 1.2, XML Schema bullet doesn't mention the XMLS contribution 
> of datatypes to OWL
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> Section 1.3, bullet 2 on OWL DL, "computed" to "computable"
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> Section 1.3, bullet 2 on OWL DL, "decidability" to "decidable"
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> Section 1.3, 2nd to last paragraph, "provided by OWL DL and OWL Full" 
> to "provided by OWL DL" (sentence is discussing choice between Lite 
> and DL)
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> Section 1.3, last paragraph, last sentence, "OWL DL and OWL Lite" to 
> "OWL DL" (referenced appendix doesn't appear to mention OWL Lite)
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> Section 2.1, third column of constructs gets truncated by most 
> printers, reducing column width of first two columns slightly should 
> solve the problem
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> Section 2.1, move rdfs:subClassOf above rdf:Property for consistency 
> with discussion paragraphs that follow
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> Section 2.1, under Header Information, "ontology" to "Ontology"
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> Section 2.1, appears to be missing discussion of OWL constructs:  
> distinctMembers, ObjectProperty, Nothing, Thing, restriction, onProperty
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> Section 2.1, appears to be missing rdf(s) constructs: List, nil, type, 
> Datatype, Literal
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> Section 2.2, first sentence, "addition to those" to "addition to or 
> expand those" (to cover things like intersectionOf which has already 
> been listed in 2.1
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> Section 2.2, appears to be missing OWL constructs: AnnotationProperty, 
> OntologyProperty
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> Section 2.2, move complementOf above intersectionOf for consistency in 
> discussion that follows
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> Section 3.1., class bullet paragraph, "and a superclass" to "and is a 
> superclass"
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> Section 3.1, class bullet paragraph, "and a subclass" to "and is a 
> subclass"
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> Section 3.1, subClassOf bullet paragraph, "is a Mammal" to "is also a 
> Mammal"
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> Section 3.1, rdfs:domain bullet paragraph, "relates individual" to 
> "relates an individual"
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> Section 3.1, rdfs:domain and rdfs:range bullet paragraphs, "below on 
> local restrictions" to "below on property type restrictions" to match 
> heading
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> Section 3.1, rdfs:range bullet paragraph "i.e., Deborah is the child 
> of Louise," to "(i.e., Deborah is the child of Louise),"
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> Section 3.3., transitive property paragraph, extra carriage return 
> exists after "ancestor)."
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> Section 3.4, title, "Restriction" to "Restrictions" for consistency 
> with table of contents
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> Section 3.7, title, "Datatypes" to "OWL Datatypes" for consistency 
> with table of contents
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> Section 4., title, "FULL" to "Full"
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> References, OWL Test citation, "9" to "15" in date
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> Sorry if these are too nit picky, just trying to help!
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> Lee
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