Re: Comments for OWL Candidate Recommendation

thanks for your careful reading of the documents and the comments.

I made the word changes you suggested to the overview document that were 
not already in the editors draft.
I did not make the "members" to "participants" change since there are 
some people who are members of the working group although I have never 
seen them participate.   (I did made the working group to Working Group 
change.)
I will ask internally for one consistent phrasing for the last paragraph 
within all of the working group documents.

The Overview document update is in its usual editors draft location -
http://www.ksl.stanford.edu/people/dlm/webont/OWLOverview.htm

Concerning the paragraph in the Guide section you mention below, I can 
rewrite it but I had never heard of  "IANA  reserved sites per RFC 2606" 
before. 
I do need some examples in that section and could provide more 
description and drop the URLs for which I can not control persistance if 
that is preferable.
Are you suggesting taking the functional url example - 
http://wine-portal.com/ - out of the text and putting in
 non functional url you mention wine-portal.example.com  that has the 
appropriate naming?   This means that people could not click through to 
the site and would just mean I need to do a bit more description in the 
example.

thank you,
Deborah

Susan Lesch wrote:

>
> Hello,
>
> These are minor editorial comments for your OWL Candidate
> Recommendation [1,2,3,4,5,6], I hope in time for your deadline.
>
> Overview [1]
> s/publically/publicly/
> s/members of this working group/participants in this Working Group/
> s/Grahm/Graham/
> s/emposed/imposed/
> s/indivual/individual/
> s/simililarly/similarly/
>
> For the References section, there is an example here:
> http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#ref-section
>
> ---
>
> Guide [2]
> s/intepreted/interpreted/
> s/likeliehood/likelihood/
> s/modificatons/modifications/
> s/subClsssOf/subClassOf/
> s/Workng/Working/
> s/Ontolgoy/Ontology/
> s/URI's/URIs/
> s/members of this group working group/participants in this Working Group/
>
> For the References section, there is an example citation here:
> http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#ref-section
>
> Links outside, like rdf:ID need a reference and section. There is an
> example here:
> http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#linking-within
>
> Section 7.2 most likely needs to be rewritten to point only to IANA
> reserved sites per RFC 2606 (example.org, example.com and example.net
> or if you need evocative names, e.g. wine-portal.example.com). The
> examples and links here could be omitted. If they can't be omitted and
> you can assure persistence then they can be references. If I can be of
> assistance please let me know and I will help rewrite this. I am sorry
> to have to say this at CR.
>
>     A number of sites exist today that call themselves wine portals.
>     Google for example, provides 152,000 matches for the query "wine
>     portal". One of the top matches, a site called "Wine-Portal.com",
>     provides access to a number of sites. Many sites claiming to be
>     wine portals are mostly informational sites. For example,
>     wine-portal.com's first featured site, called 'cork cuisine'
>     (www.corkcuisine.com/), provides information about matching wines
>     and foods, wines as gifts, etc. Another site billed as "the
>     Internet Wine Portal" ( www.cyberbacchus.com/) provides a nice
>     organization of a substantial amount of wine information on
>     numerous topics.
>
> Similarly, links like these should be omitted or made into citations.
> wine agent
> http://www.ksl.stanford.edu/people/dlm/webont/wineAgent/
> listing
> http://www.wine.com/search/ea_results.asp?ct=1577&query=zinfandel
> Marietta
> http://www.b-21.com/marietta/
> http://www.mariettacellars.com/welcome.html
>
> ---
>
> OWL Reference [3] is beautifully done!
> s/members of this group working group/participants in this Working Group/
>
> ---
>
> Semantics and Abstract Syntax [4]
> s/discusion/discussion/
> s/particulary/particularly/
> s/vocabularly/vocabulary/
> s/members of the W3C Web Ontology Working Group/participants in the 
> W3C Web Ontology Working Group/
>
> ---
>
> Test Cases [5]
> s/web/Web/
> s/web-site/Web site/
> s/working group/Working Group/
> s/favourable/favorable/
> s/members of this group working group/participants in this Working Group/
>
> ---
>
> Use Cases and Requirements [6]
> s/web/Web/
> s/,,/,/
> s/members of this group working group/participants in this Working Group/
>
> OntoWeb, The Open Directory Project, Agentcities, can be references if
> you need to link to them.
>
> In the References section, the work's title should be the link. There
> is an example here: http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#ref-section
>
> ---
>
> [1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/CR-owl-features-20030818/
> [2] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/CR-owl-guide-20030818/
> [3] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/CR-owl-ref-20030818/
> [4] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/CR-owl-semantics-20030818/
> [5] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/CR-owl-test-20030818/
> [6] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/CR-webont-req-20030818/
>
> Best wishes for your project,

Received on Sunday, 21 September 2003 13:06:03 UTC