Re: Easy-to-read / plain language edit

Hi all,

To clarify my comment in #2 below: I think there should not be duplicate sections between the two pages.

Right now it looks like there are Background, User Group, and Objectives sections in both the main page and the CfP page. I think it would be good to have sections in only one page (and then point to them from the other page).

(Also, still needs plain language edit -- especially to simplify the summary/introductory short paragraph that will go on both web pages and the CfP e-mail.)

~Shawn


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Subject: 	Easy-to-read / plain language edit
Date: 	Fri, 24 Aug 2012 15:44:14 -0500
From: 	Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
To: 	Klaus Miesenberger <Klaus.Miesenberger@jku.at>, Simon Harper <simon.harper@manchester.ac.uk>, Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>



Hi Klaus&  all,

Sorry I haven't had a chance to review your updated information (and won't during vacation this week and early next week).

Two things I do want to clarify from Wednesdays' teleconference:

1. Easy-to-read/plain language edit. Given the topic, I think it would be very good to have someone who is skilled at "plain language" to suggest edits the text. (It would be embarrassing if people critiqued the e2r symposium pages as having overly complex language. :-()

(I consider myself a pretty good, clear writer, but Kath's plain language edits really helped improve the tc4r pages -- and they could still use more editing.)

2. Sections in the 2 pages: We did change the organization of the sections between the two pages (main page and CfP) since the first draft that you used as a template. Which info goes on which page is something that we haven't fully worked out in RDWG yet. Shadi did put it clearly on the last teleconference: basically, the main page will live on forever, whereas the CfP page will soon become historical reference material.

Maybe a few hundred potential submitters will look at the CfP page before the deadline; whereas, hopefully many times that will look at the main page before the Symposium, and many thousands will look at the main page in the months&  years afterwards. :-)

Keeping this in mind, I think it is still open for you to suggest information in one page or the other as you think it best fits. (although I would be hesitant to have the same section heading with different content in the two pages) Hope that helps...

OK, all for now... nephew calling me back to vacation...

~Shawn

Received on Wednesday, 29 August 2012 13:24:26 UTC