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RE: FW: Please review: Draft Call which includes Use Cases

From: Marja-Riitta Koivunen <marja@w3.org>
Date: Wed, 15 Oct 2003 12:05:20 -0400
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To: "Markku T. Hakkinen" <hakkinen@dinf.ne.jp>, "Public-Wai-Rd" <public-wai-rd@w3.org>

Good changes! I agree with all.

Marja

At 11:58 AM 10/15/2003 -0400, Markku T. Hakkinen wrote:
>Thanks Marja!
>
>Comments, anyone?
>
>Here are some quick comments:
>
> > 2. Introduction
> >
> > Occasionally Web users need to make sense of complex information
> > and large data sets.
>
>"Occasionally" didn't seem right. Here is an alternate sentence:
>
>"The web is home to a growing and dynamic source of complex information and
>data sets from many domains."
>
> > This information includes scientific measurements, information
> > of models, demographic information, information of Web communities,
> > relationships between Web pages, and Web metadata.
>
>Some rewording of the above sentence:
>
>"This information includes scientific measurements, financial data,
>modelling and simulation results, demographic information, and metrics
>describing the web itself (communities, metadata, and relationships between
>pages)."
>
> > Researchers try to develop innovative graphical presentations of the
> > information (visualizations) to make it easier for a user to see what is
> > happening with one glimpse, make comparisons in several dimensions, and
> > find irregularities or anomalities from the information. Especially
> > visualizations try to 1) help users see new, interesting information or
> > relationships between data or 2) help illustrate structures and known,
> > useful relationships.
> >
>
>Since we try to include "practicioners" in our audience, I tried to include
>them, along with a few other changes:
>
>"Researchers and practicioners are seeking to develop innovative graphical
>presentations of information (visualizations). Effective visualization can
>make it easier for a user to quickly ascertain trends, make comparisons in
>several dimensions, and detect irregularities or anomalies in data.
>Visualizations can help users see new, interesting information or
>relationships between data, and illustrate structures and known, useful
>relationships."
>
>
>That's all I have for now... Comments?
>
>mark
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