RE: FW: Please review: Draft Call which includes Use Cases

Thanks Marja!

Comments, anyone?

Here are some quick comments:

> 2. Introduction
>
> Occasionally Web users need to make sense of complex information
> and large data sets.

"Occasionally" didn't seem right. Here is an alternate sentence:

"The web is home to a growing and dynamic source of complex information and
data sets from many domains."

> This information includes scientific measurements, information
> of models, demographic information, information of Web communities,
> relationships between Web pages, and Web metadata.

Some rewording of the above sentence:

"This information includes scientific measurements, financial data,
modelling and simulation results, demographic information, and metrics
describing the web itself (communities, metadata, and relationships between
pages)."

> Researchers try to develop innovative graphical presentations of the
> information (visualizations) to make it easier for a user to see what is
> happening with one glimpse, make comparisons in several dimensions, and
> find irregularities or anomalities from the information. Especially
> visualizations try to 1) help users see new, interesting information or
> relationships between data or 2) help illustrate structures and known,
> useful relationships.
>

Since we try to include "practicioners" in our audience, I tried to include
them, along with a few other changes:

"Researchers and practicioners are seeking to develop innovative graphical
presentations of information (visualizations). Effective visualization can
make it easier for a user to quickly ascertain trends, make comparisons in
several dimensions, and detect irregularities or anomalies in data.
Visualizations can help users see new, interesting information or
relationships between data, and illustrate structures and known, useful
relationships."


That's all I have for now... Comments?

mark

Received on Wednesday, 15 October 2003 12:01:03 UTC