A few comments on Dev Guide to Eval Tool Features

Hi Carlos, Shadi,

Good to see this draft making good progress!

With regard to the question of whether this is ready for FPWD, it is 
already more well-developed than many FPWD. Nevertheless, you should 
probably consider the following aspects:

1. Please be sure to proofread and spell check

2. It needs a funder acknowledgement.

3. The purpose of the document needs to be clearer; if the purpose is 
to *encourage the development* of more of the features that you 
describe, rather than just naming and describing potential features, 
that is important to say; also if the purpose is to enable clearer 
categorization and description of evaluation tools, for instance so 
as to be able to profile them clearly as in the appendices, then it 
would helpful to the reader to clearly say that as well. Otherwise it 
is difficult to understand the purpose of the document, and it all 
seems very abstract.

4. The abstract needs fine-tuning in any case; this part is all of 
what some people read, and should be extremely clear.

5. The editor's draft needs a more complete status section before 
publication as a FPWD, even if sent separately from ed's draft

6. The 1st paragraph of "features" section looks like a disclaimer; 
maybe flip the second paragraph.

7. The terminology "test subject and its environment" is wording that 
sounds more suitable for animal (including human) subject testing. 
Perhaps try something like "the context in which the evaluation tool is used."

8. I encourage rewriting the following sentence in plainer language 
so that it is easier to understand: "The accessibility evaluation 
tool should describe which of the aforementioned formats can be 
parsed and evaluated with the tool."

9. Once you have more clearly described the purpose of the document, 
I suggest re-examining what you are telling people in the 
Introduction. It might be helpful to introduce people to the purpose 
and scope of the document; and orient people very quickly to what's in the doc.

Thanks and best,

- Judy


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Received on Tuesday, 17 June 2014 13:04:39 UTC