tweaked wording

Hi,

For you information, I have received offline feedback about the content of the Demo pages, which concluded that some of the text may actually be offensive (depending on the sensitivity level). The following changes have been made:

1. Home Page and Info Page
 - Changed all occurrences of "Organ donations" to "Brain donations"
 - Rationale: brain donations are fictional (these days at least), organ donations on the other hand a real issue for some people

2. Info Page
 - Dropped: "Time to get the big syringe, the camera crew and a D-list celebrity to do the honours."
 - Rationale: humor may be a little too vivid for some audiences.

3. Info Page
 - Dropped: "That and we just don't have big enough jars to pickle them in."
 - Rationale: may be somewhat too harsh to speak like that of baby pandas.

4. Info Page
 - Dropped: "Two-four-six-eight! Proud to be a neonate!"
 - Rationale: "neonate" may seem political, couldn't think of something else (I'm not a funny person).

Let me know if you have comments or feedback on these changes (or suggestions for improving).

Regards,
  Shadi


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Received on Friday, 17 March 2006 18:06:19 UTC