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Re: editorial comments on SPARQL Query Results XML Format editors draft

From: Dave Beckett <dave.beckett@bristol.ac.uk>
Date: Mon, 25 Jul 2005 11:29:17 +0100
To: Jeen Broekstra <jeen@aduna.biz>
Cc: RDF Data Access Working Group <public-rdf-dawg@w3.org>
Message-Id: <1122287357.11128.20.camel@hoth.ilrt.bris.ac.uk>

On Fri, 2005-07-22 at 16:27 +0200, Jeen Broekstra wrote:
> First a comment somewhat outside scope: the DAWG page 
> (http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/) still lists the link to the WD 
> draft and the editor's draft as "SPARQL Variable Binding Results XML 
> Format". This should probably change to "SPARQL Query Results XML Format".
> 
> ----
> 
> Review http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/rf1/
> $Revision: 1.33 $ of $Date: 2005/07/21 13:51:05 $
> 
> 
> Table of Contents (http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/rf1/#contents)
> -------------
> 
> The links for section 2.2 (Header) and 2.3 (Results) refer to the 
> wrong anchor. Both refer to "#docElement", this should be "#head" and 
> "#results", respectively.

Fixed.

> 2. Definition (http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/rf1/#definition)
> -------------
> 
> "and this document defines an XML serialisation to encode variable
> bindings Query Results from SELECT (SPARQL Query section 10.2). and
> returning a boolean result from ASK (SPARQL Query section 10.5)"
> 
> I suggest rewording and fixing of punctuation to:
> 
> ". This document defines an XML serialisation to encode variable 
> binding query results from the SELECT result form (SPARQL Query 
> section 10.2) and boolean query results from the ASK result form 
> (SPARQL Query section 10.5)."

Thanks for the words, changed to use them.

> 
> 2.1 Document element 
> (http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/rf1/#docElement)
> --------------------
> 
> "The XML format has document element sparql element ...."
> 
> I suggest rewording to:
> 
> "The XML format has as the document element the sparql element ..."
> 
> or alternatively:
> 
>"The XML format has as the document element sparql ..."

Used the second suggestion.

> 
> 2.3.1 Variable Binding Results
> http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/rf1/#vb-results)
> ------------------------------
> 
> In the explanation of the ordered attribute, I suggest adding 
> explicitly that if set to true, the xml element order reflects the 
> query result order.

OK, added a sentence.
  If the attribute value is <code>true</code>
  then the XML element order of <code>result</code> elements matches
  the query results order.

> ---
> 
>   "The distinct attribute indicates that the results have are distinct
>   ..."
> 
> I suggest removing the redundant 'have'.

fixed

> ---
>   "Note: The blank node label I is scoped to the result set XML
>    document  and does not have any association to the the ..."
> 
> I suggest removing the redundant 'the'.

Fixed

> ---
> 
>   "A query solution encoded in this format could look something like
>    the following:"
> 
> I suggest rewording to something a bit stronger (it 'could' look 
> 'something like' leaves a lot of room for alternatives ;)), for example:
> 
>   "An example of a query solution encoded in this format is given
>    here:"

OK, strengthened to
  An example of a query solution encoded in this format is as follows:


> ---
> 
> 
> Jeen

All committed in CVS version 1.34 of
http://www.w3.org/2001/sw/DataAccess/rf1/

Thanks

Dave
Received on Monday, 25 July 2005 10:29:33 GMT

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