Re: Primer WD2 ready for review

Simon, Yolanda

overall this version reads very well (it has actually passed a readability test with several different M.Sc. students now, to whom 
it's been useful as an intro to PROV-DM).

As a general comment I had made in earlier  stages, I think the primer could benefit from a graphical depiction of the examples. I 
think having a graph that grows progressively with the new elements added to the example would provide a more immediate perception 
and a complement to the narrative.

I agree with Luc's comments in a separate email that the PROV-N version of the example should be on par with the Turtle one (if I 
interpret the comment correctly). I am happy to revise the PROV-N snippets in detail, I haven't checked whether there are 
misalignments with the latest BNF.

minor comments:

- unclear sentence (does it add anything?)
   " Descriptions can be included, in PROV-DM data, of particular activities using or generating particular entities."

- 2.4L mention association in addition to attribution?

- add ref to Turtle?  it would have benefited the students for example

typo: of a that

Cheers,
  -Paolo



On 4/1/12 7:35 PM, Miles, Simon wrote:
> Hello,
> The primer is ready for review by the WG, ahead of the next release.
> http://dvcs.w3.org/hg/prov/raw-file/default/primer/Primer.html
> Thanks,
> Simon
> Dr Simon Miles
> Senior Lecturer, Department of Informatics
> Kings College London, WC2R 2LS, UK
> +44 (0)20 7848 1166
> Electronically querying for the provenance of entities:
> http://eprints.dcs.kcl.ac.uk/61/


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