Re: [poe] Definition of ODRL

A fresh read of the [charter](https://www.w3.org/2016/poe/charter) may also help to improve the abstract. The current abstract reads:

> The Open Digital Rights Language (ODRL) provides a flexible and interoperable information model, vocabulary, and encoding mechanisms for describing statements about the usage of content and services. The ODRL Information Model describes the underlying concepts, entities, and relationships that form the foundational basis for the semantics of the ODRL statements.
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> Policies are used to explicitly state what are the permitted and prohibited actions over a certain resource, as well as the obligations required to be meet by stakeholders. In addition, policies may be integrated with constraints (e.g., time constraints) which apply to such actions to impose further restrictions to the uses of the resource.
I suggest a few changes:

- change the word "describe" by "represent" in the first paragraph to be more precise and to avoid an inelegant repetition of the word.

- replace "ODRL statement" by "ODRL policy", to introduce that policy is the main element of an ODRL expression. Otherwise "policies" appears as the first word in the second paragraph without introduction.

- replace "policies may be integrated with constraints" by "policies may be limited by"

- replace "explicitly state" with "represent"

- replace "resource" by "asset"

- shorten a redundant part of a phrase, introduce "duty" instead (I added the word "payment" which may be unpleasant, though).

My suggested abstract would read:

The Open Digital Rights Language (ODRL) is a policy expression language that provides a flexible and interoperable information model, vocabulary, and encoding mechanisms for representing statements about the usage of content and services. The ODRL Information Model describes the underlying concepts, entities, and relationships that form the foundational basis for the semantics of the ODRL policies.

Policies are used to represent permitted and prohibited actions over a certain asset, as well as the obligations required to be meet by stakeholders. In addition, policies may be limited by constraints (e.g., temporal or spatial constraints) and duties (e.g. payments) may be imposed on permissions.

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