[Bug 16204] New: editorial - sec. 1.2 needs a few commas

https://www.w3.org/Bugs/Public/show_bug.cgi?id=16204

           Summary: editorial - sec. 1.2 needs a few commas
           Product: HTML WG
           Version: unspecified
          Platform: All
        OS/Version: All
            Status: NEW
          Severity: normal
          Priority: P2
         Component: HTML5 differences from HTML4 (editor: Anne van
                    Kesteren)
        AssignedTo: simonp@opera.com
        ReportedBy: dsb@smart.net
         QAContact: public-html-bugzilla@w3.org
                CC: mike@w3.org, public-html-wg-issue-tracking@w3.org,
                    public-html@w3.org, annevk@opera.com


In section 1.2, the second sentence says:

  To keep the authoring language relatively simple for authors several 
  elements and attributes are not included as outlined in the other 
  sections of this document, such as presentational elements that are 
  better dealt with using CSS.

That would be cleared with a few more commas, perhaps as:

  To keep the authoring language relatively simple for authors, several 
  elements and attributes are not included, as outlined in the other 
  sections of this document, such as presentational elements that are 
  better dealt with using CSS.

(Note that you don't want the middle per of that to read "not included
as outlined in..." (which would make this second contradict or override
the later sections).)

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Received on Friday, 2 March 2012 18:18:49 UTC