RE: Use Cases review

On Mon, 2007-02-12 at 09:57 -0500, Clark, John wrote:
> Dan Connolly wrote:
> > > Clark, John:
> > > > 1. Introduction[1]:
> > > >   
> > > >   * "There are many dialects in practice among the many XML 
> > > > documents on the
> > > >     web."
> > > >     ->
> > > >     "There exist many dialects of XML in use by documents 
> > on the web."
> > > >   
> > > Done.
> > 
> > Hmm... that seems overly stilted, to me.
> > 
> > Note that this sentence also starts the main spec. I don't 
> > intend to change it.
> 
> I was simply trying to clarify the original, which seemed a bit
> confusing.  Perhaps "There are many dialects of XML in use by documents
> on the web." would be easier to read.

Perhaps. Meanwhile, Danny A. suggested another edit to that sentence
in the spec.

Ugh. I've read it too many times to know which words are easier to read,
any more.


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Received on Tuesday, 13 February 2007 21:39:04 UTC