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Re: doc editing, authors and call for technical editor -- Re: a new member weighs in

From: Jose M. Alonso <josema@w3.org>
Date: Fri, 24 Apr 2009 19:42:57 +0200
Cc: Kevin Novak <kevinnovak@aia.org>, John Sheridan <John.Sheridan@nationalarchives.gov.uk>, Suzanne Acar <Suzanne.Acar@ic.fbi.gov>
Message-Id: <3DC755FF-7160-429D-AC74-4E4FA62C8621@w3.org>
To: eGov IG <public-egov-ig@w3.org>
Also, I've just started to edit the document online, noting where some  
issues are and updatind some text according to discussions. You can  
track changes with any HTML diff tool.

Original doc: http://www.w3.org/TR/2009/WD-egov-improving-20090310/
Current draft: http://www.w3.org/2007/eGov/IG/Group/docs/note

W3C has one available at: http://www.w3.org/2007/10/htmldiff
although it seems it has some issues at the tail end of the doc

Cheers,
Jose.


El 23/04/2009, a las 14:39, Jose M. Alonso escribió:
> All,
>
> I'm happy to announce Suzanne Acar has volunteered to do the  
> technical editorship part. Once again, thanks Suzanne!
>
> Suzanne and Kevin will coordinate and plan and I'll take care of the  
> W3C pubrules compliance and publishing process.
>
> Best,
> Jose.
>
>
> El 21/04/2009, a las 12:56, Jose M. Alonso escribió:
>> Hi again Sharron,
>>
>> This one on the bit about how editing and authorship is handled and  
>> the need for a technical editor.
>>
>> A couple months ago, Chairs and me asked people to contribute to  
>> the document. Not much response due to people's time constraints  
>> mainly, so we decided to take ownership of sections to coordinate  
>> content there and others could help with text and ideas [1].
>>
>> The main authors were slightly updated subsequently and a current  
>> list is the one below. Kevin also took responsibility for editing  
>> the document for coherence and I for making it W3C pubrules  
>> compliant and go through the publishing process.
>>
>> It has been suggested to us that we might want one person with  
>> technical editorship expertise give a read and make some final  
>> changes. We agree but don't have such background.
>>
>> Do you? Would anybody with such background like to mainly join  
>> Kevin and help us in that sense? Job will be intense but short term  
>> if we want to publish by mid May.
>>
>> Hope this helps.
>> Jose.
>>
>>
>> Group Note sections and main authors so far
>> -------------------------------------------
>> * Introduction (Kevin)
>> * A Shift of Perspective: Provide, Engage, Enable (Kevin, John)
>> * Participation and Citizen Engagement (John)
>> * Open Government Data (Jose)
>> * Interoperability (Oscar)
>> * Multi-channel delivery (Miguel)
>> * Identification and Authentication (Daniel)
>> * Long term data management (Chris)
>> * Next Steps (Kevin)
>>
>> [1] http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/public-egov-ig/2009Jan/0015
>>
>>
>> El 17/04/2009, a las 17:02, Sharron Rush escribió:
>>> Hello folks,
>>>
>>> First congratulations and deepest thanks for the work you have all  
>>> done in producing this document.  I can't think of any more  
>>> important use of technology than to establish an effective two-way  
>>> dialogue between citizens and their governments.  So please know  
>>> that my comments are offered with sincere respect and appreciation  
>>> for all that you have done.
>>>
>>> We have been reviewing the document in the WAI Education and  
>>> Outreach Working Group (EOWG) from the point of view of the  
>>> treatment of accessibility for people with disabilities.  EOWG has  
>>> been compiling those comments and they will be submitted  
>>> separately.  My comments here will be more general and are offered  
>>> as an individual rather than a group representative.
>>>
>>> The idea of a W3C document about open government/e-government is  
>>> tremendous and timely.  In my opinion, we must make the first  
>>> document a model of the openness and transparency we hope and  
>>> expect for governments to achieve.  With that in mind, I suggest a  
>>> reorganization of the document as follows:
>>>
>>> 1. Clarity - why is the document being developed? statement of  
>>> principles and goals
>>> 2. Simplification - move some of the more detailed aspects into  
>>> related documents, but keep first working draft on higher level
>>> 3. Improve focus - The Introduction and a few of the other  
>>> sections are somewhat rambling and do not seem related to each  
>>> other and/or to specific to governmental issues.  The document  
>>> needs to be edited for coherence and narrative flow.
>>>
>>> I hesitate to be more specific in my comments since I know that  
>>> there are serious time constraints.  I have been sending the URL  
>>> around to others that I know are interested in e-government and  
>>> who are working on related issues.  One reported back to me that  
>>> she was unable to make her way through the entire doc without  
>>> getting "lost."  Another noted to me (and I hope sent public  
>>> comment)  that the citizen viewpoint needs to be included more  
>>> strongly and that more acknowledgement is needed of the way  
>>> technology enables two-way interactions, not simply a way to make  
>>> existing government more efficient.
>>>
>>> I am not sure how the editing is organized, but would suggest that  
>>> whoever leads the development of each section look for ways to  
>>> shorten and clarify and that the editors look for ways to improve  
>>> the structure and the way that sections relate to the overarching  
>>> principles.
>>>
>>> Please let me know if this is useful and/or if I can help in any  
>>> way.
>>>
>>> Thanks again for taking this on - it is tremendously important!
>>>
>>> Best,
>>> Sharron
>>>
>>> ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
>>> Sharron Rush |  Executive Director  |  www.Knowbility.org |  512  
>>> 305-0310
>>> Equal access to technology for people with disabilities
>>>
>>
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