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Re: doc editing, authors and call for technical editor -- Re: a new member weighs in

From: Jose M. Alonso <josema@w3.org>
Date: Fri, 24 Apr 2009 19:53:54 +0200
Cc: "'public-egov-ig@w3.org'" <public-egov-ig@w3.org>, "'kevinnovak@aia.org'" <kevinnovak@aia.org>, "'John.Sheridan@nationalarchives.gov.uk'" <John.Sheridan@nationalarchives.gov.uk>
Message-Id: <3EA31CC7-7723-46AD-A60F-ACEA3852B5D8@w3.org>
To: "Acar, Suzanne" <Suzanne.Acar@ic.fbi.gov>
Good, thanks. So I'll try to upload as much as possible before then.

-- Jose

El 24/04/2009, a las 19:47, Acar, Suzanne escribió:
> That's perfect.  I got lost thru all the e-mail suggestions for  
> content.  Going to one place to edit the draft is better for me.  I  
> can put much time into this tomorrow from home.
> Have started some edits on a hard copy today but hard to make  
> progress here in the office.
> Thanks,
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: Jose M. Alonso <josema@w3.org>
> To: eGov IG <public-egov-ig@w3.org>
> Cc: Kevin Novak <kevinnovak@aia.org>; John Sheridan <John.Sheridan@nationalarchives.gov.uk 
> >; Acar, Suzanne
> Sent: Fri Apr 24 13:42:57 2009
> Subject: Re: doc editing, authors and call for technical editor --  
> Re: a new member weighs in
> Also, I've just started to edit the document online, noting where some
> issues are and updatind some text according to discussions. You can
> track changes with any HTML diff tool.
> Original doc: http://www.w3.org/TR/2009/WD-egov-improving-20090310/
> Current draft: http://www.w3.org/2007/eGov/IG/Group/docs/note
> W3C has one available at: http://www.w3.org/2007/10/htmldiff
> although it seems it has some issues at the tail end of the doc
> Cheers,
> Jose.
> El 23/04/2009, a las 14:39, Jose M. Alonso escribió:
>> All,
>> I'm happy to announce Suzanne Acar has volunteered to do the
>> technical editorship part. Once again, thanks Suzanne!
>> Suzanne and Kevin will coordinate and plan and I'll take care of the
>> W3C pubrules compliance and publishing process.
>> Best,
>> Jose.
>> El 21/04/2009, a las 12:56, Jose M. Alonso escribió:
>>> Hi again Sharron,
>>> This one on the bit about how editing and authorship is handled and
>>> the need for a technical editor.
>>> A couple months ago, Chairs and me asked people to contribute to
>>> the document. Not much response due to people's time constraints
>>> mainly, so we decided to take ownership of sections to coordinate
>>> content there and others could help with text and ideas [1].
>>> The main authors were slightly updated subsequently and a current
>>> list is the one below. Kevin also took responsibility for editing
>>> the document for coherence and I for making it W3C pubrules
>>> compliant and go through the publishing process.
>>> It has been suggested to us that we might want one person with
>>> technical editorship expertise give a read and make some final
>>> changes. We agree but don't have such background.
>>> Do you? Would anybody with such background like to mainly join
>>> Kevin and help us in that sense? Job will be intense but short term
>>> if we want to publish by mid May.
>>> Hope this helps.
>>> Jose.
>>> Group Note sections and main authors so far
>>> -------------------------------------------
>>> * Introduction (Kevin)
>>> * A Shift of Perspective: Provide, Engage, Enable (Kevin, John)
>>> * Participation and Citizen Engagement (John)
>>> * Open Government Data (Jose)
>>> * Interoperability (Oscar)
>>> * Multi-channel delivery (Miguel)
>>> * Identification and Authentication (Daniel)
>>> * Long term data management (Chris)
>>> * Next Steps (Kevin)
>>> [1] http://lists.w3.org/Archives/Public/public-egov-ig/2009Jan/0015
>>> El 17/04/2009, a las 17:02, Sharron Rush escribió:
>>>> Hello folks,
>>>> First congratulations and deepest thanks for the work you have all
>>>> done in producing this document.  I can't think of any more
>>>> important use of technology than to establish an effective two-way
>>>> dialogue between citizens and their governments.  So please know
>>>> that my comments are offered with sincere respect and appreciation
>>>> for all that you have done.
>>>> We have been reviewing the document in the WAI Education and
>>>> Outreach Working Group (EOWG) from the point of view of the
>>>> treatment of accessibility for people with disabilities.  EOWG has
>>>> been compiling those comments and they will be submitted
>>>> separately.  My comments here will be more general and are offered
>>>> as an individual rather than a group representative.
>>>> The idea of a W3C document about open government/e-government is
>>>> tremendous and timely.  In my opinion, we must make the first
>>>> document a model of the openness and transparency we hope and
>>>> expect for governments to achieve.  With that in mind, I suggest a
>>>> reorganization of the document as follows:
>>>> 1. Clarity - why is the document being developed? statement of
>>>> principles and goals
>>>> 2. Simplification - move some of the more detailed aspects into
>>>> related documents, but keep first working draft on higher level
>>>> 3. Improve focus - The Introduction and a few of the other
>>>> sections are somewhat rambling and do not seem related to each
>>>> other and/or to specific to governmental issues.  The document
>>>> needs to be edited for coherence and narrative flow.
>>>> I hesitate to be more specific in my comments since I know that
>>>> there are serious time constraints.  I have been sending the URL
>>>> around to others that I know are interested in e-government and
>>>> who are working on related issues.  One reported back to me that
>>>> she was unable to make her way through the entire doc without
>>>> getting "lost."  Another noted to me (and I hope sent public
>>>> comment)  that the citizen viewpoint needs to be included more
>>>> strongly and that more acknowledgement is needed of the way
>>>> technology enables two-way interactions, not simply a way to make
>>>> existing government more efficient.
>>>> I am not sure how the editing is organized, but would suggest that
>>>> whoever leads the development of each section look for ways to
>>>> shorten and clarify and that the editors look for ways to improve
>>>> the structure and the way that sections relate to the overarching
>>>> principles.
>>>> Please let me know if this is useful and/or if I can help in any
>>>> way.
>>>> Thanks again for taking this on - it is tremendously important!
>>>> Best,
>>>> Sharron
>>>> ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
>>>> Sharron Rush |  Executive Director  |  www.Knowbility.org |  512
>>>> 305-0310
>>>> Equal access to technology for people with disabilities
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