RE: last changes?

Hi All,

How do these seem? Mostly the use of parenthesis to help with the “comma overload” plus an extension on the loss of rights and freedoms to cover people the user is acting on behalf of

Important information:
Information the user may need to complete any action or task (including offline tasks); or information related to safety, risk, privacy, health or opportunity.

Critical service:
A service that is needed to prevent  significant harm,  loss (such as significant financial loss), illness or injury to the user, a deterioration in the condition of a patient or the effective loss of rights or freedoms of the user or someone the user is acting on the behalf of.

Jim

From: lisa.seeman [mailto:lisa.seeman@zoho.com]
Sent: Tuesday, February 21, 2017 2:47 PM
To: public-cognitive-a11y-tf <public-cognitive-a11y-tf@w3.org>
Subject: last changes?

Hi folks
Can we tighten up the wording at all for the following


important information

information the user may need to complete any action or task including an offline task, or related to safety, risks, privacy, health or opportunities



critical service

service that is needed to prevent significant harm, risk or loss such as: significant financial loss, illness, injury or deterioration in a patient's condition or effective loss of rights or freedoms

All the best

Lisa Seeman

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