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Wordsmithing changes, 8.1.2.2, 12.1, 13.1.2, 14.6,14.13

From: Ted Hardie <hardie@merlot.arc.nasa.gov>
Date: Fri, 31 May 1996 11:09:18 -0700 (PDT)
Message-Id: <199605311809.LAA04463@merlot.arc.nasa.gov>
To: http-wg%cuckoo.hpl.hp.com@hplb.hpl.hp.com
8.1.2.2

Pipelining is spelled without a hyphen except in the phrase
"if the first pipe-lined attempt fails".


In 12.1 (second to last paragraph)

I believe it would be clearer to say: 

The Vary header field lists the request header fields which might
cause the response to vary.

than: 

The Vary header field describes the dimensions over which the response
might vary (i.e. the dimensions over which the origin server picks its
"best guess" response from multiple representations).  

The replacement language is shorter and fits more closely with the
text in 13.5.

In 13.1.2

I would add the text "currently assigned", to avoid the implication
that all numbers 0 to 99 have been assigned warnings.  The text
would thus read:

Warnings are assigned numbers between 0 and 99.  This specification
defines the code numbers and meanings of currently assigned warnings,
allowing a client or cache to take automated action in some (but not
all) cases.

In 14.6

The word cache is missing its initial c.  The text should be:

The Age response-header field allows a cache to transmit age values

14.13

The content-language referenced in the example is Danish, but the
two letter code given is dk.  I believe da, as used in section 14.4,
is correct.


		regards,
			Ted Hardie
Received on Friday, 31 May 1996 11:12:25 EDT

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